Using a cell-phone in public |
It is not an exaggeration to say that cell phones have become part of our lives and its highly developed functions are beneficial. On the other hand, as far as I am concerned, using cell phones in public places needs to be regulated in terms of its unsuitability for some places as well as the possibility for some people to commit bad conducts.
First and foremost, using cell phones in public places needs to be prevented because it is inappropriate(어떤 면에서?,, topic sentence니까 얘기를 해줘야 할 듯). In other words, you can be considered impolite or unsophisticated(여기서 쓰기에는 쫌 어감이 이상한데 머라고 바까쓸지 모르겟네요 --; 토플한지 오래되성--; ㅈㅅㅋ) when you(you 쓰지 마시고 이런 에쎄이 쓸 ㄸ ㅐ는 he or she;;) use a mobile phone in some places. For instance, one of my best friends(이런 데서는 구체적이어야 되니까 이름까지 말해주면 좋겟죠 ? John정도?) had a difficulty in her company because of her conducts related to her cell phone. One day(여기도 뭐, 어제나 그저께라고 하시면 괜찮을듯), all employees in her company, including her bosses, participated in a seminar. They were discussing a new and grand project they were going to undertake, so the atmosphere of the seminar was quiet heavy and serious. In the middle of the ardent discussion, her cell phone rang. She should have turned off the phone and said sorry. However, she answered the phone in the seminar room although all participants could hear her! I know that she is generally a nice person, but many workers started to think that she is rude and uncivil. All in all, using a mobile phone in a public place should be blocked.
Second, using cell phones in public places should be regulated in terms of the fact that it can hinder what others are doing.(중요한부분.. 토픽쎈텐쓰-->> 그 토픽에 대한 설명 -->> 예시 -->> 문단을 묶어주는 마지막 말 이런식으로 가야하는데 설명이 없고 바로 예시로 가네요) It is clear when it comes to my experience in subway. I usually commute to my school by subway and read books during the quiet a long time I go there. One year ago, two girls(여기도 웬만하면 이름 말해주면 좋을듯;;) stepped on the subway which I was in(문법 쫌 이상한데 뭐라할지모르겟네요 --;ㅈㅅ). As soon as they have(same here;;;) a seat, one of the two started to play a game on her cell phone while listening to music aloud at the same time. Many people including me, who were focusing on their individual doing such as reading books or previewing a textbook, became frustrated about them. From this experience, I came to know that using a cell phone in public can be a great interference on people's working or doing.
In conclusion, as I mentioned above, using a cell-phone in a public place should be prohibited in that it is improper and can impede what others are doing. If you use your cell phone in public without caring for others, I recommend that you remind these facts and avoid it.
콩클에는 clincher하나 써주시고 써머리하시면 되겟네요 ㅣ;;
- 제 생각이었습니다;;- m(-_-)m |