Some people say that watching movies at a theater is better because of technological effect, (has better system..? tech. effect 라고 하면..의미가 애매모호 하니까요!) but I think that it is better to watch movies at home. There are some reasons to support my idea that (my idea 바로 뒤에 that~ 하면 that 이하의 문장은 모두 idea 를 수식하는것으로 해석됩니다^^. my idea 다음 ; 세미콜른으로 이어주시고, 그 다음에 바로 it is more ~ , and ~ 이렇게 써주는게 좋을것같네요!) it is more comportable, (comfortable) also, (콤마 잊지마세요~) I can concentrate only on movies.
(두번째 이유를 다시 써주세요! concentrate on ~ ? theatre 에서 보면 distracted 되나요?! 다른 표현을 써주세요!!^^ 말이 조금 어색하니~^^.)
First of all, watching movies at home is more comfortable. if we go to theater, we should sit straigh at on a uncomfortable (a/an, the 주의!!) single seat, and we should still watch almost two hours. (같은 주장이니 and we should~ 이렇게 하는것 보다는 sit still on ~ for more than an hour 하다고 쓰면 좋을것같아요^^) In contrast, watching movie at home, (반대로, 영화를 집에서 보는것은, we do not have to~ ?? watching = 동명사로 쓰셨으니 콤마 뒤에는 동사가 와야겠죠^^ 아니면 "~, if we watch movies at home, ~" 이렇게!) we don't have to dress up uneasy clothes, and we can watch the a movie with any pose what you want, even we can even lie dawn on the bed. For example, when I went to the movies theater to watch a movie with my friends, but I couldn't concentrate on a movie (특정한 movie, 따라서 the movie) because a tall man was right in front of me (OR 나의 sight 를 막았다). of in front of tall man. He hidden blocked my sight to the screen, so I couldn't see anything. (앞 문장의 좀 더 specific 한 내용이기 때문에, 굳이 두 문장으로 나눠 쓸 필요없이, 앞 문장의 tall man 뒤에 who blocked ~ 이렇게 표현하면 좋을것같네요^^) It was so a terrable experience that I have ever went to the theater, (the most terrible experience I have ever had) so I did do not go to the theater any more. (, therefore, I never~ anymore. anymore 띄어쓰기 없습니다.) In this regard, watching movie at home is more comfortable, so it is better. (watching movies at home is better, because ~)
(맨 앞문장 자기 주장만 똑똑히 잘 표현해주셨어요~^^
관사 실수 주의하시구요, 그리고 bold한 부분은 문법실수, 스펠링실수 입니다^^. 작은 실수는 절대 하지않도록 주의하셔야해요~!
그리고 tall man 의 예제는 좋지만, 어째 whole 주장이 theatre 에서 보는게 uncomfortable 로 바뀐것같아 보이네요..! tall man 설명은 짧고 아주 간단하게 써주시구요! 반면에 집에서 보면 행동이 free하고 불편한 자리에 앉지 않아도 되며, ~ 이렇게 주장과 직접적 연관이 있도록 써주세요!
스펠링 실수.. dawn, terrable .. 주의하시구요!)
Moreover, I can watch a movie without any interruption. (아니면, there is no interruption~ OR ~watch movies with no interruption. 방해가 없다는 것을 강조하기 위해서 with no ~ 를 써주는것이 더 좋겠네요!) I like to watch a movie alone, (콤마!!) because I want to concentrate on only (only on the) movie. In theater, there are many people who eat popcorn, drink softwater and talk noisily, (many people eat popcorn, drink~ at theatre. 가 더 좋겠네요.) so (therefore,) I cannot concentrate on a (the) movie, but I can make good mood (I am in a good mood...?) to watching movie in my house, (when I watch movies at home), such as take (taking) some curtain (taking curtains..?) and turn(ing) off the cell phones. cellur phone. For example, my friends has a high-quality digital television, so he enjoy watching movies at his house. It is not only comfortable, but also feel spectacle with technological sound effects. In this respect, I think it is better to watching (to watch OR watching.) movies at home.
(문법 실수 - bold 한 부분입니다. 주의하세요. 그리고 I like to watch a movie alone~ 부터 turning off cell phones 까지 모두 한 문장인데요, 콤마+but 보다는 (문장의 길이가 있으니) . However, 이 더 좋을것 같네요.)
To sum up, I confirmly concern firmly believe that watching a movie at home. is better, because It is more comfortable, also and I can watch a movie without with no interruption. so I think that it is better to watching a movie at home.
(맨 앞과 뒷 문장이 똑같이 반복되는데, 문장을 두번씩 반복하기 보다는..그냥 하나로 짧게 쓰고, 그 뒤에 this is because~ 이런식으로 이유를 나열하는것이 좋습니다^^) |