Q: Increasing teacher salary will improve the quality of education in a country.
A: It is often said that the quality of country’s education will be improved with teacher’s high salary. I believe that monetary reward will contribute to country’s education for two reasons: It motivates teachers to do their work with more passion and makes them( teacher) not to change their jobs move other jobs just for money.
To begin with, to give money in rewards for teachers' effort rewarding teacher with money will encourage them to teach more enthusiastically. This is because financial rewards can serve as one of key motivators for teachers to perform better and to improve themselves. Thus, a better rewarded teacher will likely pay more attention to students and strive to improve teaching method(s). According to the Ministry of Education of Korea in 2011, there was a difference between two groups of teachers: Group A received a (bonus) incentives at the end of the year based on students' performance and Group B was not rewarded (by) anything. The study found out that the former group had spent more hours preparing for classes by 25 percent and had resulted in higher student grades of students than the latter letter group. This implies that monetary reward has a definite correlation with a teacher’s amount of teachers' effort and energies they put into teaching.
In addition, high salary will prevent good teachers from moving to other jobs. In today’s society, economy in one country is strongly connected to other countries and 1. businesses have to intensely compete both at home and abroad. Under this circumstance, although people with limited job experience are not likely to get a job, people with high quality are apt to change their job pursuing high salary. Eventually, teachers receiving with lower poor salary will look for another job (find other job) for high reward and this will make countries’ educational quality worse wores. Take my uncle’s case as an example, he was a teacher in elementary school and had strong interest in teaching boys and girls despite of low salary. However, when his kids were growing up, he needed became to spend more money for a living so he (and) suffered from tight financial budget. Eventually, even though he loved his students strongly, he finally has taken a new job in local construct company that offered high salary.
1. 문장이 애매모호합니다. "경제활동이 경쟁력있어야한다" 라는 뜻이라면 "competitive" 형용사를 써주는 것이 더 분명한 의미를 표현하게 됩니다. business whould be competitive both at home and abroad.
* eventually 와 finally 는 중복표현입니다. 따라서 하나를 지워야합니다. Even though he loved his students strongly, he, eventually, took a new job in local~
In conclusion, increasing teachers’ salary will make the high/better quality of education. That is because this will mill make teachers put more effort in teaching without worry about financial budget.
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