■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Your Answer :
The reading passage contends that tax of
tobacco can be fully explained by three claims. On the other hand, the lecturer (사람이기 때문) contradicts the reading by saying that none of the three claims are convincing.
First, the speaker argues that raising the
tax on cigarettes does not make it less likely that the young generation youth will start smoking.
This is because the teenagers buy cigarettes in the red market. (암시장이란 뜻의 black market을 red로 잘못 쓰신건가요??) The red markets
do not have to check ID and is are cheaper than other stores, so many young people
use the red market when they need cigarettes. This casts doubt on the reading
passage’s assertion that young people will be more likely to start smoking when
the government increases the tax on tobacco.
Second, according to the lecturer, it is
impossible to repair damage inflicted on the environment by the cultivation of
tobacco when the government increases the tax on tobacco. If this tax is higher
than before, the number of people who can buy tobacco will be decreased. In this situation,
the government cannot make money for to combat the environmental problems. This
refutes the reading passage’s argument that increasing the tax will make it
possible to repair damage on the environment.
The final point made by the lecturer is that
it is difficult to say that the revenue raised by a higher cigarette tax can be
reduced reduce poverty. When the company makes tobacco, they create lots of jobs. This
counters the reading passage’s claim that increasing the tax on tobacco can
help poor people by providing them with financial help. |
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점수: 25/30
무난하게 잘 쓰셨습니다.
스트럭쳐를 잘 이해하시고 계신 것 같습니다.
다만 아쉬운점은 좀 더 구체적인 evidence를 제시했으면 좋았을 듯 합니다.
예를 들어 마지막 문단에서 어떤 financial help가 가능한지 등등...
그리고 문법에서는 주어와 동사가 일치하지 않아 어색한 부분이 있습니다.
수정본 참고해주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*