▶ Your Answer : The lecturer argues that the controversies around the manned mission to Mars aren't convincing for several ways. This counters the reading passage's claim that the trip to Mars is risky and has various disadvantages. First, the lecturer points out that the dust on Mars' surface would not cause a huge problem; this is because the dust can simply be removed by using sound wave technology. He explains that if the astronauts use the high-pitched sound waves, they can get rid of the dust which poses a threat to human health and the spaceships. This casts doubt on the reading passage's claim that the hazardous dust may discourage the Mars expedition. Next, the lecturer contends that the astronauts are unlikely to be engaged in mental problems that the reading passage suggests. According to the lecturer, the astronauts receive an extensive training before they start their missions on Mars; therefore, most of them do not suffer from the longevity and isolation during their trip. Furthermore, the lecturer says that there is a counseling program that is served during the Mars expedition. With the video therapists within the counseling program, the astronauts' mental health is secured. This contradicts the reading passage's claim that the length of the journey and isolation from Earth may cause the astronauts some serious problems like anxiety and depression. Lastly, the lecturer asserts that the expense for the trip to Mars is worthwhile. While the reading passage denotes that the manned missions are costly and sometimes fail to retrieve the important data, the lecturer claims that the opposite is the truth. He explains that the Mars exploration in an ongoing process and, therefore, is a worthy try. Not only that, the cost for the expedition can be recovered by international partnerships. Since the international partnerships invest sufficient money on space missions, money is nothing to worry about. This refutes the reading passage's claim that the manned mission to Mars is a waste of time and money.
Fair: 17~23 점수: 22 가장 중요한 리딩에 대한 정보가 많이 부족한 통합형 에세이입니다. 통합형 에세이에 있어서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것 중에 하나는 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가진 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 반박하고 비교하는 지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우에는 리딩에대한 정보가 부족합니다. 한 문장으로 리딩에 대한 정보를 끝내는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 부분들을 더 서술해주시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |