주제: dorm or apartments?
When students attend a university, they need to make an important decision whether to live in dormitories or in their own houses such as apartments. I prefer living(to live) in dormitories to living (rather than to live )in apartments because I believe there are several benefits that I can earn by living in dormitories. In dorm, I can have more chances to interact with lots of people. Moreover, I do not have to worry about transportation.
The university is the place where people from all over the world gather to get a deeper (upper-level) education. Students can have great chances to meet new people and interact with others. Yet, if students live in dormitory, the possibilities that they can meet a lot of people increase. Dorm is the place where students study, sleep, eat, play, and so on. Therefore they can have numerous experiences with others by living together. Because every person is come comes from different backgrounds, interacting with each other is great opportunity to widen the insights of students.
On top of that, I do not have to concern about my transportation to go to school. If I live in my own house apart from the school, I have to worry about the way to go to university everyday. It does not matter which transportation I use. If I use a car, I can be bothered by lack of parking space near the classes. Subway can be cumbersome because I have to walk pretty long distance to reach get to the school. Besides, if I live in a dormitory, I can have more time to get rest before the class because class is close to where I live.
As examples I mentioned above prove, it is more beneficial to live in dormitory rather than in apartments. I can have valuable experiences and I do not need to worry about transportation if I live in a dorm. However, there are fewer chances that I can have great relationships with others and more occasions when I need to worry about ways to go to school if I live in apartments.
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