"돈을 쓸때, 휴가나 음식같은 단기간에 쓰고 없어지는데 돈을 쓰는것보다 장기간동안 유용하게 사용할수 있는것에 투자하는게 훨씬 좋다." 동의하냐 안동의하냐 |
Each person has respectively different spending habbit. Some people prefer to spend for short-term pleasure such as a vacation, delicious food, live concerts, and so on. While other people have completely different tendency of expenditure. They spend on things that last long time; for example, a computer, books, electric appliances, and so forth. No one can say that what kind of people are right or wrong because the way of spending own money is totally depends on one's freedom. However, I think that it is better to spend money like the latter people rather than like the former people.
First of all, buying things that last long time gives me continuous pleasure. When I was freshman, I awarded some money, about $600, from my university's package design contest. I thought for very long time for what would be the best way to spend this money. At first, I planned to go to a vacation to beach because it was summer, and the end of semester was near. However, after deep consideration, I changed my mind. I decided to buy a notebook computer. This was because if I go to a vacation, certainly it will be really enjoyable time for me; but there is nothing left after vacation except memories and pictures. On the other hand, if I buy a notebook computer, I can use it for a long time and it will gives me continuous convenience and pleasure as far as I have it. Thus, I thought that it is more reasonable to buy a notebook computer than spending money on vacation.
Another important reason why it is better to spend on things that last long time rather than spending on short-term pleasure is that it enhances the quality of life directly. Just think about the example of mine that I have already pointed out. If I went to vacation, it might have been pleasant experience, but vacation itself cannot contribute to improve the quality of my life. In contrast, the notebook computer that I bought instead of going vacation significantly improved the quality of my life. I didn't have to bring heavy desktop computer to my dormitory room any more. I brought my notebook computer to class and used it to study more effectively. It provided much other convenience that helped improving my school life.
In conclusion, I prefer to spend on things that last long time rather than spending money on things that gives only instant pleasure. This is because the former things provides comparatively long-lasting pleasure and convenience than the latter things. Added to this, the former things improve the quality of life more directly than the latter things. Therefore, I can assuredly assert that it is better to spend money on thing that lasting long time.
논리가 빈약해요 ;_; 특히 두번째 패러그래프 삶의 질 언급은 좀 어거지인듯;; 아 그리구 첫째 패러그래프에서 든 디자인 콘테스트는 뻥입니다 ㅋㅋ 질문좀요 1.This was because 라는 표현을 썼는데 이거 맞나요? 과거에 일에대해 얘기해서 was로 썼는데;; 2.같은 문장에서, 세미콜론(;)을 사용했는데 용법이 맞는지요.. →This was because if I go to a vacation, certainly it will be really enjoyable time for me; but there is nothing left after vacation except memories and pictures.
그리구 마지막으로..이 에세이는 아니지만 다른 에세이에서 엄청 긴 문장을 써버렸어요.(33단어;;) 문법 틀린거 없는지 체크좀 해주세요 (--)(__)
→Another important reason why it is better to know about the events that seems not related to me is that understanding these foreign events will broaden and deepen my scope of the world.
덧글 달아주시는분들 너무 감사합니다..라이팅 25점을 향해 ㄱㄱㄱ PS:다른 브레인슷호밍 아이디어 있으신분들 덧글좀 주세요..이거 토픽이 만만하지 않은것같아요.. |