It is often said that as modern people are needed (need) to handle too many things, they are more unlikely to doing things well( they are less likely to complete works well..). However, some people disagree with this statement because today’s society requireds a well-rounded person, thus many people are familiar with this trend to survive in this modern society. However, in my opinion, today’s people are too busy to stay focus on individual tasks any things, leading to poor results for two reasons: participating in too many things works in limited time and lots of tasks that are required to survive in this modern society.
>> ; people suffer from obsession to complete too many works required from the society with the limited time..
To begin with, people have to spend fewer time too many things as they participate many different things. people allocate their time for all different tasks, with the difficulty to concentrate on one task at a time. This is commonly observe that these days children have to do a minimum of three extra curriculum activities such as playing the piano, learning a second language and swimming, while those in the past did less after school. Thesedays it is easy to observe a lot of children participating in a lot of activities after school such as playing music
instruments, learning a second language or swimming.. A variety of activities could help children to develop themselves with the balanced personalities but too many tasks bring side effects, stressing out those children...
Thus children have to assign their times to for each activity, resulting in investing fewer times in for each. The time limit deters children from specializing in any areas. To demonstrate, according to the Ministry of Education of Korea in 2007, there was a positive correlation between the amount of time spent studying second language and the fluency among students. Students who spent learning speaking English more than 9hours during week day, could speak more fluently than those who spent less time.
In addition, today’s people have lack of passion as they are required to deal with too many things. This is because, to keep up with this fast-changing and competitive society, people need to be equipped with a wide range of knowledge, maintaining social network and their jobs. When they are pushed to handle too many things, they are more likely to get a lot of pressure which can lead to a decrease in working efficiency. For example, my little sister, she has to take care of her baby and go to work to make a living. However, whenever she goes to work in the morning, she has a hard time to calming down her baby and so she has to take the baby taking her to the nursing facility, //sometime, this can result in going to work late and increasing her stress. >> She sometimes go to the work late with more stresses...
In brief, today working too many thing can have a negatively impact on doing each thing perfectly because of doing lots of things in a limited time and pressure of completing too many things to make a living.
you have to study grammar more, should develop ur sentences also......
if you can, don't use the word, "thing" too much in ur essay..
gud luck |