Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that might destroy the friendship. |
Yesterday, I watched Friends, a popular american comedy drama. In the episode that I watched, Rachel pointed out that Joe did not wear suitable outfit for the wedding they attended together. In Friends, Joe really appreciated Racheal since she helped him to fix his mistake. Likewise, I believe that many people agree that to indicate their friends' mistakes is better than to do nothing. However, I strongly think that to let a frined make a mistake is better than taking some actions that might destroy the friendship due to two reasons. First, fixing the mistake by oneself is more valuable. Second, it's hard to define what is mistakes. Firstly, letting friends fix mistakes is more efficent and long-lasting.Of course, friends will fix their mistakes more easily and faster. However, as they fixed their behavior without realizing the underlying problem by themselves, they will continuously wonder what's really the matter. Thus, it's evident that If I point out my friends' mistakes, they will made the same mistake again. For instance, several months ago, I told my friend Jessica in person that she often says bad words. At the very moment, Jessica seemed to try to be careful when she speaks. However, soon, she started to say bad words again. However, several days later, she suddenly became a totally new person. Her words were lovely. She explained me that one day she suddenly felt that saying bad words is too ugly. Thus, she changed her words all by herself. And up to now, Jessy is my friend who speaks lovely words. Thus, I believe that just letting friends to make mistake is better than doing somethings since the former one offers a chance for friends to fix the mistake by themseleves. Second, I insist that letting friends make mistakes is better since it's hard to define what the mistake is. Everyone has diffrent backgrounds and experiences. Thus, some mistakes are acceptable behavior to some people while others can not tolerate them. Thus, it's very dangerous to blame friends who make mistakes on your own criteria. For instance, my friend Sue is from the U.S. And I'm from Korea. Last year, I invited Sue to Korea. When we had meals in Korean traditional restaurant, I was very angry when she started coughing on the table. And I told Sue not to cough. That's because coughing on the table is often considered rudenss in Korea. However, soon, she told me that she really did not know such a meaning of coughing since it do not exist in the U.S. After then I learn that I should avoid indicating my friends' mistakes since what I think mistake can be widely accepted behavior on my friends' standard. In conclusion, I firmly believe that letting friends making mistakes is better than taking some actions. Of course, people may argue that friend should help each other to fix wrong behaviors or mistakes. However, as I mentiond above, indicating friens mistake has only temporary effect on fixing the mistake. Futhermore, It's very dangerous to judge what is mistake or tolerate behavior on friends critiera. |
Criticize 하겠습니다. criticize는 despise와 다르니 알고계시길바라구요.
1. BG로 쓰신 '프렌즈'라는 미국드라마가 잘못된건 아닙니다. 충분히 grade를 매기는 ETS
사람도 familiar한 드라마이고 공감할수있기때문입니다. 다만 '드라마' 보다 다른 BG를
깔아서 더 효과적으로, 짧은 문장으로 의사전달하면 좋겠습니다.
Rachel Racheal 두명은 다른사람입니다. 이름은 spelling이 틀리면 점수에 영향이 있습니다.
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Likewise, I believe that many people agree that to indicate their friends' mistakes is better than to do nothing. 분명치 못한 의사전달입니다.
해석해보겠습니다.
마찬가지로, 나는 사람들이 친구의 잘못들은 가르키는 것이 아무것도 안하는것보단 낫다는
것에 대해 동의한다고 믿습니다.
specify할때 이렇게 vague하게 쓰면 혼나죠.
또 indicate 단어사용 틀렸습니다. 친구의 잘못을 지적한다면 criticize같은 단어를 쓰십시요.
indicate는 해석시 '지적'한다는 뜻이있어서 언뜻보면 맞아보이지만
사전찾아보십시요. 그냥 잘못을 '방향' 또는 'opinion'을 포함시켜 가르킨다는 의미입니다.
이해하셨겠죠.
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However, I strongly think that to let a frined make a mistake is better than taking some actions that might destroy the friendship due to two reasons
앞에선 believe, 뒤에선 think. 차라리 disagree with that 하면서 이끌어나가시는게 낫다고 봅니다.
let a 틀렸습니다. Topic을 보시면 letting 입니다.
to let과 letting의 미묘한 의미적 차이. 그때만 하는것. 계속 하는것.
그의미상 차이때문에 ing가 topic에 나오면 ing로 쓰셔야합니다.
due to two reasons. 그냥 because 쓰십시요.
First, fixing the mistake by oneself is more valuable.
OFF TOPIC입니다.
TOPIC은
Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that might destroy the friendship.
친구가 실수를 하도록 내버려두는것이 낫냐 아니면 우정을 깰수도 있는 말 또는 행동을 하는게 낫냐.
fixing 부터 valuable 까지 다 off topic.
친구의 잘못을 지적하는 행동을 할것이냐 말것이냐라는 토픽에대한 답변으로
First, 혼자 잘못을 고치는게 더 가치있다. (X)
여기서 또한가지의 off topic.
Topic에 better이 나왔는데 그럼 100% agree or disagree입니다.
그럼 thesis에 think가 아니라 agree라고 나와야합니다.
추가로 님이 하신 답변을 예를들어 설명해볼게요.
너는 친구가 실수를 헀을때 그냥 냅두는게 우정이깨지더라도 지적하고 말해서 고치게
하는 것보다 낫다고 생각하니?
네.
왜?
전 실수는 혼자 고치는게 더 가치있다고 생각하거든요.
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OUT LINE 다시하세요.
Second, it's hard to define what is mistakes.
OFF TOPIC 입니다.
define하기 어렵다는 reason이 나올 essay topic이 아닙니다.
mistake가 있고, 그 mistake에 대한 지적의 여부입니다.
define이라는 단어가 나올 에세이가 아닙니다. 할필요도 없구요.
실수라는것은 정의하기 어렵기때문에 우정을 깨뜨릴 말이나 행동을 하지 않는게 나요.
실수는 정의하기 어렵기때문에 친구가 실수해도 내버려두는게 나요.
Logic도 깨지구요.
Off topic이면 GOOD인 content를 담은 essaym도 fair이하로 나올수있습니다.
Out-lining 잘하세요.