주제 : Some people believe that zoos serve useful functions. Other people believe that it is cruel and wrong to confine animals in zoos.
As the spring comes up, many people have a picnic with their family in the zoo and park. By the way, after enjoyable going out, some people argue that animals in the zoo seemed to be weak and inactive. They also casts doubt that if zoos do their functions well. On the other hand, I have the opposite idea to these people because of the educational faculty and effort of the zoo.
Zoos have the ability to educate young children. In the modern society, many kids do not have enough chance to interact with a wide variety of animals inasmuch as there is only small percentage of forests or jungles in highly developed cities. Therefore, the zoo help children have realistic experiences and teach them about nature. To illustrate this point, "Seoul land" which is a sort of the zoo in my town is planning to encourage the projet called "Going back to nature". This huge enterprise is a program that people can touch and contact with animals closely and directly. According to the announcement, it is able to take care of younger animals oneself and this might improve the skill of responsibility and independence of children. As a result, young kids will learn a vast amount of information about living creatures by gaining their experiences at first hand.
Animals are living in the most appropriate conditions. All people wants to see healthy and animate animals in the zoo. Thus, most zoos devote their money and time to keep the best conditions everyday. This can be easily proved by my friend who is working as a top breeder in a zoo which is one of the most famous zoos in the world. My friend demonstrated that most zoos spend money to make animals feel comfortable and feel like home. He additionally explained that they had used the most expensive food, check the condition of animals health once a month and clean their cages everyday. This shows that zoos always endeavor to raise animals in good conditions.
When I watch birds flying in the sky, I usually think about animals which are locked in narrow cages. Actually, some people claim that the zoo is cruel and try to confine innocent animals in the zoo. On the contrary, I believe that the zoo has many advantages and they are functioning well right now. This is because there is an effective educational aspect and proper conditions of the zoo.
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