Serious movie that designed make you think is better than watch fun movie that designed primarily for fun. |
As far as I can remember, people have been debating the pros and cons of the statement that watching serious movie is better than funny movie. From my personal angle, I strongly disagree with the above statement for the following two reasons. My two main points are as follows: people watch movies mainly because relieve their stress from their hectic life schedules not only that but they also can experience something special with their family and friends by watching movie together. To begin with, people who watching movie are able to reduce their stress level from those funny movies. Nowadays, there are numerous events constantly occurring around the world, and thus serious movies offer us to think about the issue in an objective point of view. Serious movie, however, are more likely to lead people in more stress rather than make them funny and laugh which are given by funny movies. Therefore, there is no wonder that enjoying funny movies is much wise choice than contemplating serious one. To illustrate, according to a survey recent released by the Korean National Research Center, more than two thirds of surveyed moviegoers responded that the main reason for their affection of movie is not getting information or knowledge but having moments of laughing away their troubles and stress while watching interesting movies. Thus, we can clearly realized that the main function of the movie is not providing people of a chance to consider a certain issue but enjoying the time and imaging themselves in and out of the movies. In this sense, there is no doubt that movie is something that give us joy and exhilaration rather than burden to think about. AS for the second part that I had mentioned earlier, people can share extraordinary experience by watching funny movie. Some people might assert that we can verify our stance and point of view while we find ourselves assimilated to the story of the movie. However, intriguing movie can offer us the chance to experience something unusual, such as flying the sky, traveling to outer space, and being a toy. Therefore, we are definitely assist that funny movies can be more beneficial than those of serious. Take Herry Potter, one of the most famous funny movies in the world, as an example. The story of the Herry Potter is well-known in the novel its name as the title. In the past, we have no choice but to utilize our imagination to descript the scene that little boy of magician frying over the sky with his buddies. In contrast, thanks to the technological development and special effects, people can experience to make themselves into the main character including playing magic to people in need and fighting against the monsters almost same as in real. Obviously, if we had decided to go for the serious movies, it would have never been experience such unforgettable things. In this context, watching funny movie can be much recommendable than those of serious. In brief, funny movies need to be considered positively in terms of promoting our mental status and well-being. People go to the movies teacher mainly because of laughing away their stress from suffocating lives and they also can experience somewhat special experience with their family and friends by watching funny movie. In general, I wholeheartedly, believe that the very first thing we should to now is admitting the importance of enjoying funny movie as the main diversion in our stifling lives. |
As far as I remember. 내가 기억하기론.
비확실하죠? 설득하는데 도움이 별로 안되니깐 something 이런것과 마찬가지로
essay쓸때는 안쓰는게 오히려 좋은 단어에요.
above statement 라고 하셨는데 statement를 paraphrase하시면서 restate 하시는게 좋습니다.
above 말구요.
My two main points are as follows:
이런 기능적인 단어는 ESSAY에 최대한 쓰지않는게 좋습니다.
마치 my essay will talk about이라고 쓰는것처럼요.
Because나 That is~~. In addition ~~.하시는게 더 좋습니다.
people watch movies mainly because relieve their stress from their hectic life schedules not only that but they also can experience something special with their family and friends by watching movie together.
문장 grammar 깨지구요 콤마가 있어야할 곳들에 빠져있습니다.
영화를 mainly 스트레스 해소를 위해 본다고하셨죠. 약간 과장의여지가있어요.
Romance, love story, sad movie, historical movie 흠.. 여자는 모르겠으나 (로맨스 좋아들
하시니) 그닥 stress를 relieve 하기위해 볼만한 영화들은 아니죠? '마라톤'도요.
people who watching movie are 문법 깨집니다. sentence 깨지면 점수안나와요.
grammar 연습이 좀 많이 필요로 합니다.
여기까지만 첨삭할게요. 화이팅~!