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Q: University studnets should not be required to attend the classes. instead, they should be abel to recieve credits through a final test or paper.
opening ] should university student really be required to attend the class??
thesis ],I believe student does not have to attend the classes to get the credits.
topic1 ] there are so many things out there to learn from other than the text book.
example]
In the class room, every students will be able to learn and therefore to accumulate decent average level of knowledge, but student looking for more than mere average , should be given a choice ( with consent from him or her that ) whether they would seek further learning at the class room or enlarge their learning experience at outside the class room. student could choose subject relevant job and therefore learn from the rea lworld, which in class room never be possible.
topic2 ] some students aren;t rich enough to spend all day long at learning
example ]
University tutions are costly that some of the student cannot afford to spend all day learning things,
some of them have to earn to keep up their learning, ironically . instead they should be given a choice of attendance and do things that is , at the moment, most crucial to their continuency of learning. student could work part time in store and earn otherwise might not have been possible because of the class being placed between working hour .
conclusion ]
Attending the class should not be mandatory, for some of the student think they can learn more from the outside and some of them have , there needs to be more options for students as student;s needs vary one from the other.
College students are grown up , which means they are aware they are responsible for whatever effects it will bring to them from the consequence of their choices. so let them have it and let them make most out of their time.