Working with other people or alone is very significant problem, because it affects accomplishment of work. Some people might argue that choosing job which people can work alone has advantage, because they can concetrate on their work. In my point of view, however, working with other people is more beneficial in the aspect of offering better working environment. In this essay, there are two reasons to support the main idea: social and efficient aspects.
To begin with, working together socially provides good chance to meet diverse people. It is very significant for people in business to broaden human networks, because human relationship can offer unexpected opportunities. For example, my father, who works in bank, has to meet many various people in business. Although it is very tiring work for him to pursue making accounts in his bank, he works hard every day and enjoy meeting people. One day, one customer who knows my father's effort recommends him to another company which provides higher salary and condition. Thanks to the customer, he can take unexpected chance to take better job.
In addition, people who work together can save their time by cooperating with other people. There are many difficulties which people cannot solve alone. If people help each other, they can spend their time more efficiently. To illustrate, when I studied for a project in university, I worked with my friends. However, it is difficult for me to fully participate in the project, because, at the same time, there were so many jobs I had to do such as part time jobs, internship, and volunteer work. Fortunately, my friend understood me and adjusted project meeting time for my schedule. Thanks to their helps, I could complete all works and save my time.
To sum up, I strongly believe that working together is better than working alone: getting more chance to succeed and spending time more flexible. Therefore, it is helpful for people to work with others, if they want to take successful working environment.
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