" Easy earned, easy go" was stressed when the economy was bad in Korea. Even though I agree that we should spend money for our economy growth, I personally assert that we should save moeny for the our own unpredictable future. Saving money not only can give us to get chance to prepare for the future and but also help us to focus on the work with comfortable mind.
In the beginning of that, since we are living in the middle of materialism society, we need to save money for the future for better life. As the average life span is getting longer than before, silver ages? are now increasing compared to infinite hopital facilities(무한한 hospital facilities?limited instead of infinite?). It means without the money we might not get the benefit of the facility when we are old. According to the national statistics, in recent, 10 % of the silver ages(senior citizens) cannot get adquate facilities, so they suffer from their sickness. Plus, according to the news, pension will be possibly depleted in 50 years,(pension을 50년안에 다 써버린다는 말인가요?>pension자체가 없어진다는 말인가요? so we should not depend on the pension system that offered from country. In other words, without the personal savings, we may not get appropriate remedy for the future from our country. These points shows that the more money we save, the better our lives will be expected.
On top of that, saving money can help us to improve work efficency. It means we are able to concentrate on not moneny, but work(on work, not money). No one who worry about thier credit card fee or housing fee can focus on thier work. (이럴땐 noone보단 그냥 People~~ cannot focus가 낫겟구요,
noone은 단수입니다.) It makes people work ineffectively, absoultely causesing people to frustrate. For example, one of my freinds always enjoys her life with spending her money without saving. But, the time before she has to pay for credit card fee or rent fee, she asks people for helping her out. No work produtivity as well as no concentration on work cannot be expected(found from) on her lifestyle. In this sense, I think saving money can help people to get confidence for thier lives, resulting in more productivity. 문단내에서 confidence를 준다는 얘기를 하나도 안하다가 마지막줄에 떵하니 써놓으면
아무래도 덜 developed되 보이니까요; 그거에 대한 설명을 넣든가 빼든가 하시기 바래요
음 근데 이 문단이 주제랑 딱 맞는지는 헷갈리네요;돈을저금하거나 바로 쓰거나인데..
신용카드 쓰는것보다 저금하는게 더 낫다는 주장인가요?
In conclusion, even though we have to spend some money for our healthy economy ,I think saving moneny has many benfits for my life. I can prepare for my unpreditable future and just focus on my work with confidence. Saving money will be my invaluable assets and power for my life.
쫌 어색하거나 헷갈리는 문장이 쫌 있구요, 복잡하게 쓰실려고 하시지 마세요 문장이 의미가 거꾸로가
되니까요^^:
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