▶ Your Answer : In the reading passage, there is ample support for the author's claim that there are some theories about the Little Ice Age. The professor in the lecture gives several reasons as a rebuttal to refute the author's suggestion. First Frist, the professor contends that the reduced amount of solar radiation is not the a reason for the Little Ice Age. There was no decline of solar energy as the number of sunspots are is reduced. As a result, there is no relation between sun's radiation and sun spots. This casts doubt on the reading passage's assertion that diminished solar radiation makes made the Earth cooler. Next, the professor insists that volcanic eruption does not have has not great impacts on the Earth's temperature. It is true that the ash and dust from the volcano eruption interfere with solar radiation getting into atmosphere. However, the ash and dust are cleaned soon and the Little Ice Age occurred occured 500 years ago. It was before the volcanic eruption. 내용 더 간결하게 줄여보면 좋을 것 같아요. This counters the author's claim that the Little Ice Age might have been started because of volcano. Finally, the professor argues that the Earth's reflectivity is not an the only cause of the global cooling effects. Cloud also intervenes with the solar energy's entrance into the Earth. This refutes the author's suggestion that declining of the Earth's temperature happened due to the reflection of the Earth. 단순히 reflection때문이라는 설명은 어색해 보여요. 지구의 reflection이 '어땠기 때문에' 기온 하강이 일어난 것인지를 찾아서 함께 정리해주어야 할 것 같습니다. 지문의 정확한 내용을 한 번 더 확인해주세요.
Comment : 전반적으로 깔끔하게 잘 요약해주셨는데, 서술이 불필요하게 길거나 detail이 충분하지 않은 부분들은 보완이 필요해 보입니다. 지문 내용을 정확히 모르는 상태에서 체크한 내용이니 실제 문제 지문을 다시 검토하시면서 내용과 흐름 바로잡아주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 4/5 A response at this level is generally good in selecting the important information from the lecture and in coherently and accurately presenting this information in relation to the relevant information in the reading, but it may have minor omission, inaccuracy, vagueness, or imprecision of some content from the lecture or in connection to points made in the reading. A response is also scored at this level if it has more frequent or noticeable minor language errors, as long as such usage and grammatical structures do not result in anything more than an occasional lapse of clarity or in the connection of ideas. |