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Undoubtedly, society plays a significant
role in people’s daily lives in many of the places they work or play. Some
people think that books have influenced society more than television has, while
others do not. Both sides may have their own reasons to support their views. If
I had to choose one, I would say that the television has influenced the society
more than books. There are several reasons as follows.
Most of all, people could learn new things more
efficiently by watching television than by reading books. Television is
equipped with many functions that help people study efficiently and accurately.
When these functions are well used, it is likely to bring a better result in
their performance. For example, my youngest brother studied Spanish with his
high school textbook, but he was poor at it even though he studied it for 1 a year. He
has changed little by little after he started to repeat after the Spanish actor’s
words in television. He was able to improve his Spanish skills, such as vocabulary a wide
variety of word usage, pronunciation, and grammar. Now he speaks Spanish fluently
and even encourages others to study Spanish harder. Without this experience, he
would have been poor at Spanish.
Moreover, people watch Television more than
the books. With the widespread of television, the book has lost its position as
information delivery intermediate (표현이 어색합니다 medium of information이라는 표현을 쓰시려 한건가요?). It is impossible to deny that television has
more influential power than books. Let me give you an example of this. In the early
15th century, there were a lot of murder cases in UK. However, most
of people lived living in that era did not know about them because they depended only
on books, which were published a long time after the accident was organized. In
Contrast, most of people living in present know the summit talk between North
and South korean president, as they are broadcasted in television every day all
around the world. Without the spread of television, people would have been
confined to their own life, without any information around the world.
To sum up, I think the effects that television
has influenced the society far outweigh those that book has. The importance of
television’s influence cannot be overestimated in life. 예상점수: 21-24 총평: 일단 어색한 표현이 군데 군데 있어서 잘 확인해보시고 수정하세요. 문법적으로 큰 문제는 없지만 자잘한 실수들에 주의하세요. 내용적으로 봤을때 첫번째 이유와 예시는 잘 제시해주셨는데 두번째 이유는 약간 논리적이지 못한것 같아요. 예를 들어서 텔레비젼이 없을때 신문 등과 같은 매체도 있었는데 너무 비약적인 논리인 것 같습니다. 텔레비젼이 다른 매체들에 비해서 확연한 장점을 제시해주시는게 더 좋았을 것 같아요. 수고 많으셨습니다.
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