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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic : We all work or will work in our jobs with many different kinds of people. In your opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker? | |
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We cannot live in the world alone, and therefore cooperation is necessary in (for) all kinds of works. From elementary school projects to preparing for funerals (arrangement for a funeral) , nothing we can do alone but with co-workers. However, as working with co-workers, people sometimes feel disgusted or proud of their co-workers due to the co-workers' characteristics. I think two important characteristics of a good co-worker would be their are accountability and ability to listen to others' words and to accept them.
First of all, being accountable makes up a good co-worker for everyone.(그냥 Accountability is one of important characteristics to be a good co-worker. or An accountable person possibily become a good co-worker...이렇게 ) Different with(from) responsibility, accountability also contains the notion of doing what you are not asked for. In other words, being responsible(responsibility-명사로) contains the passive nuance, and while accountable(이것도) has the active nuance. I think this little different nuance makes up a great difference(distinction), since in most cases actively looking for what one should do results in a greater work than what their bosses asked them for. 좀더 simplify할필요가
있지 않을까요; 헷갈려서; >> active interests or participation bring about greater accomplishment than
strict rules or orders do. 뭐 이런내용인가요? In other words, accountability is more efficiant
characteristic than responsibility?
To illustrate, one day I was asked to clean my room with one friend who is noted for his accountability, and he urged me to clean the whole house. Since his accountability, I was able to have the greater result than what I have expected and therefore was complimented.
On top of that, ability to listen to others' words intently (attentively) also takes an enormous part in being a good co-worker. Since no one likes to work with tyrants, a co-worker must be able to listen to other people's suggestions and to accept them. Throughout this progress, the workers would have a better result, and also would be able to work with more pleasures. A scientific research says that teams of bosses who accept any suggestions from their employees usually are more successful in their works than teams of bosses who merely command their employees what to do.
accept보다 consult같은걸 쓰는게 더 나을 것 같네요. 받아드린다고 하는 것보다 상의하고 뭐 그런 능력.
In a nutshell, I think two most important characteristics of a co-worker will be accountability and ability to listen to others' words for these reasons. If one meets the co-worker with these two characteristics, I am sure that the one will be very happy and ardent in working with him.
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