▶ Your Answer :
The speaker explains students wearing uniforms in schools is not preferred while the reading passage supports the opposite position.
First, the speaker says that the hope of reducing instances of crime by wearing uniforms in school is just hope. In fact, the recent study in California shows that bad behaviors, especially violence, occurred occured much more than before students wearing uniforms. This refutes the claim made by the reading passages that wearing uniforms in school and during trips outside of school keeps kids safer and decreases the examples of crime.
Second, the speaker says that letting students wear the same thing negatively affects the individual characters. This rebuts rebutes the point made in the reading passages that having all of the students wear the same uniforms enhances inhance team spirit and unity amongst the students. A lot of studies have revealed that students wearing uniforms in school engage in a greater level of participation in school activities. lecture가 어떤 근거로 반대하는지에 초점을 두고 요약해주세요. reading내용은 한 문장 정도로 주장만 간단히 정리하면 되기 때문에 표시한 문장은 불필요합니다.
Third Thrid, the lecturer states that it is not true that students wearing uniforms feel less lesser pressure to follow popular fashion trends than the students not required uniforms. The study shows that only a few percentage of students display their wealth by wearing expensive clothing. This offers a counterpoint to the point mentioned in the reading passage that with uniforms, all of the students, regardless of economic background, would all be wearing the same clothes while doing school activities. Throug this, students would not feel as much pressure to imitate popular fashion trends as they would in schools that do not require uniforms. reading내용 불필요한 요소 정리해주세요.
Comment : 통합형에서 요구하는 요약문은 lecture가 reading에 '어떤 근거로' & '뭐라고' 반박하는지에 초점을 두고 정리하게 되어 있습니다. 현재 답안은 reading의 내용을 요약하는 데 분량을 너무 많이 할애하고 있다는 점이 아쉽습니다. reading내용은 간단하게 한 문장 정도로 핵심만 남기고, lecture가 어떤 근거를 들어서 반박하는지 핵심 내용을 보완해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 오탈자 꼼꼼하게 검토해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3.5/5 A response at this level is generally good in selecting the important information from the lecture and in coherently and accurately presenting this information in relation to the relevant information in the reading, but it may have minor omission, inaccuracy, vagueness, or imprecision of some content from the lecture or in connection to points made in the reading. A response is also scored at this level if it has more frequent or noticeable minor language errors, as long as such usage and grammatical structures do not result in anything more than an occasional lapse of clarity or in the connection of ideas. |