▶ Your Answer : These days, many institutions requires some subjects to accomodate require some subjects to accommodate their students. Some people think that studying overall subjects will help students. However, I strongly believe that students are likely to study better when they focus on specific subjects because of the following two reasons. study better when focusing on specific subjects for the following two subsequent reasons.
First of all, it is time consuming to study whole things. To be specific, learning from all classes waste wastes time because if education system is based on educating students every subjects without exceptions, students have to study a lot even for unneccessary class that does not helpful for students' future career. Time is Gold, so students should use their precious time with careful consideration. Just studying all subjects is not good to improve their grades. For instance, there are some students who prefer to concentrate on a particular subject because they do not need any other materials for their university. Therefore, it is effective to study subjects that students need for their future goal in special fields.
On top of that, studying general subjects makes students get boring. This is because there are some students who like to study few subjects and it they provided to listen all of it, students can even loose their own interests on their favorite parts of studying. Students would no longer like any subjects at all and this decreases students' motivation to achieve their aims. From my personal experience, seniors in Korean high school have a huge exam in their whole life. This tests determines our future. We can choose specific subjects that we would like to take courses and students need to study by themselves. However, our class teacher does not accept it so we have to prepare for his class even though we have to study for other requirements. Thus, it would be inconvenient if students should take courses that they do not need for entering a college.
To sum up, it will be more effective to choose own courses because students can save study time that they think it is beneficial for them and studnets might loose encouragement their studying behavior. In this regard, I think it is better for students to learn about particular fields in high school or colleges.
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