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Some people take it for granted that economics is the
necessary course able to be applied to every academic field. However, contrary
to this idea in contrast to this notion, it is clear that students should not be forced to take economics
courses if they do not major in.
Admittedly, economics is broadly considered as a required
course for most students in many universities although some of them are not
interested in that major. The principle idea of this would be to broaden
students' perspectives and let them bring about the better outcome to their
academic performances. One of my sisters who was majored in psychology, for
example, had advantaged by taking the economics course when she was a college
student. At first, she was really hesitated to register this course because she
had no interest at all in economics. However, after taking the Economics 101
due to the duty of requirement, she started to focus more on the mixed field of
psychology and economics and has begun to research this more. As a result, she
currently has a job related to this work.
Nevertheless, I strongly believe that most students
except my sister's case will not want to take economics if they do not major
in. It is known that economics is fairly complicated and needed to exercise
some calculations and use graphics, which would be the biggest problem to make
students feel stressed out. This situation will give a lot of burden to students
that even have many other works to do. In fact, students are one of the major
victims to have diseases due to enormous stress. My uncle, a doctor at a
general hospital, often tells me that many of his paitients come to him for
stress-related illnesses and they are almost college students who were
overwhelmed by loads of assignments and have difficulties to study
interest-free majors. For this sense, it is better for students' health not to
take economics courses if their majors are not economics.
Some people might argue that taking basic economics
courses can be helpful for students to get a job in the future. However, I
believe that they have their own major to focus on, and if they are forced to
care another course that they do not want, they will get highly stressed out
and it is unhealthy for them.
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