■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Student should not be exposed to teacher's opinion on social and political issues in class. |
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▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that teacher's opinion on social and political issues should be avoided in class. However, in my opinion, students should receive and hear their teachers' (소유격) thoughts. This is because students can get advice and knowledge. Also, they can compare their ideas with their own. To begin with, hearing teacher's opinion about social and political issues in class will make students to get advice and gain knowledge. Students will be able to receive information and learn how to approach those issues. For example, when I was in high school, I had a social science class where our teacher used to express his opinion about some political issues. This helped me to gain more knowledge about how we should approach some of those issues and understand them. The teacher also gave some of his advice to the students so that we can think about it by ourselves and this helped us a lot to think in different ways. On top of that, receiving teacher's opinion will be a good opportunity for students to compare it with their own ideas. Since teachers are more mature and more experienced, it will be helpful for students to compare it. According to the article from New York Times, it was shown that students tend to compare their ideas more with teachers' than their colleagues'. The reason for this is that they think the teachers have better ideas and want to compare it. This is a very important fact that if not in class, students will most of the time think on their own and will not be able to know the opposite side of their own ideas. To sum up, receiving more advise and knowledge as well as being able to compare their own ideas with teachers' is a very important factor for growing students. In this regard, I think listening to teacher's ideas on social and political issues is more helpful than not listening to it. |
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
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