▶ Your Answer : Some people think that students prefers prefer to talk about sensitive issues such as social events. However, I strongly believe that students should not be exposured exposed to their teachers' claim on social and political events in class because teachers should be on neutral side and students can have unappropriate logical thinking. for the following two subsequent reasons. First of all, teachers cannot show their position on social problem to their students. This is because teachers can be judged by their students and student who have different perspective may conflict with teacher's opinion. It can cause a trouble so teachers can have bias to specific students. From my personal experience, In Korea, it is not allowed teahcers for teachers to show their political color. However, in history class, my teacher came to criticize our homeland and he started to talk about his personal ideas related with politics. There were some students who did not want to listen to his talk and they just wanted to keep the class. Now, the students do not like history teacher because he had limited position. Therefore, presenting teacher's logic can be dangerous and even it can trigger bad relationship with students.
On top of that, students are still growing up and they are likely to be wrong. To be specific, if students heard some information about social and political issues by their teachers, students would have their own thinking which cannot guarantee the data is correct one. For instance, I do not want to know about fields that I cannot sure yet such as political people because if I became to have incorrect term, I have no idea that I might realize my approach or not (이 부분에서 하려고 하는 말이 무엇인가요? 이해가 되지 않습니다. 설명이 필요해 보입니다). Students should have their interest by their own researching, not by their teachers. Thus, students need to made up their minds by themselves, not by others.
To sum up, teachers do not have to tell their own logic to their students and students should decide their color about issues on their own. In this regard, I think teachers should not shout out their personal opinions on serious happening to their students.
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