■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic ::It is better to live in a small town than to live in a big city |
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▶ Your Answer Some would say that it is better to live in a big town than to live in a small city. However, I have a different idea. I think it is more beneficial to inhabit in a small city than to dwell in a big city for the following reasons. First of all, living in a small city is better than inhabiting in a big city because there is little environmental pollution. To be specific, big cities tend to be polluted a lot because there are a great number of factories and industrial constructions in metropolitan, which can result in air and water pollutions. But, there are little contamination in small town since developers do not plan to construct factories in small cities. The reason why they are reluctant to build diverse factories is that there are many disadvantages such as road system and land space. According to the study which is conducted by the KOREA University research team, they reported that the bigger a city is, the higher air pollution is due to a lot of industrial constructions. This result shows that it is better to live in a small city. Second, it is useful for people to inhabit in a small town since they can minimize expenditure. In other words, the house price in a big town is generally expensive than a small town because there are a lot of facilities such as subway, hospitals, and schools. Even though people can enjoy staying in a big city by getting various conveniences, these would make the house price in the big city so expensive because a lot of people flock to big cities, which naturally makes house price surge. Also, high living expenses are more spent by the people who live in a big city than the people who live in a small city. There is a convincing survey conducted by the NYU research team. They performed the survey in order to reveal why people move from a big city to a small town. They determined that the reason people move to it is due to high living expenses and house price in the city. Therefore, it is better to dwell in a small city. To sum up, people can save money if they live in a small town, and they can be less influenced on environmental contamination. Thus, I strongly agree with the statement above. |
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잘 쓰셨지만 중간에
The reason why they are reluctant to build diverse factories is that there are many disadvantages such as road system and land space.
이 부분은 빼는게 더 나은거같아요.
최대한 a small city의 장점을 부각해야지 단점이 나오면 좋지 않아요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*