▶ Your Answer :
The
reading passage suggests three theories to explain why whales strand on beach
sometimes. On the other hand, the lecturer brings up several ideas to
contradict all those theories such theories.
First,
the lecturer makes point that the theory about wind is inaccurate. This is
attributed to the fact that some whales strand on the beach without the variety
wind patterns. Whales' stranding occurs even in the places where a wind blows
away from the land. This refutes the author's point that whales become stranded
because of wind patterns.
Secondly,
in the lecture, the point is made that the theory about whales' illness is also
wrong. According to the lecture, not only weak or dead whales' but also healthy
ones are stranded on the beach. The lecturer brings an example where people
push the stranded whale which is able to swim on its own to the ocean and
rescue it. This casts doubt about the theory about illness.
The
final point made by the lecturer is that the theory about problem in the
geological features and sonar reflection is implausible. If a gentle slope near
beaches causes whale to strand on shore, as the lecturer points, all creatures
using sonar to detect geological formations have to be stranded. However, not
all of them are stranded on shore. This disputes the reading passages final
theory about geological features effectively. Good: 24~30 점수: 24 일단 이 통합형 에세이에서 아쉬운 부분은 리딩의 대한 정보가 많이 부족합니다. 한 문장으로 리딩의 설명을 끝내는 것이 아니라 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 문장이 더 있었음 좋았을 거 같습니다. 통합형 에세이에서 원하는 것은 얼마나 적절하게 리딩과 리스닝을 비교했냐 이기 때문에 각 단락에 있는 리딩의 이유들을 좀 더 서술해야할 거 같습니다. 수고많으셨습니다. *3번째 포인트에서 얕은 연안에 사는 whales는 거의 표류하지 않는다는 설명을 못 적어놓았습니다. 설명 포인트 중 이렇게 한개 놓치면 영향이 있을까요? 감사합니다!
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