▶ Your Answer : Some people think that recommendation from celebrities, information from magazines, or reviews from online communities have the greatest impact on customer's purchase. However, in my opinion, I think the most important factor is the recommendation from friend. This is because I and my friend and I have similar tastes and she gives an objective reviews. 질문은 본인에 대해 묻는 것이 아니라 사람들 전체를 두고 봤을 때, 무엇이 가장 큰 영향을 미치는지를 묻고 있습니다. To begin with, I and my friends and I have similar tastes on various field like clothes, cosmetic, food and so on. We are the same age and also have same interests. It makes our relationship stronger. The more we are close we are and the more we spend time together, the more we know very well each other well. My friend gives suitable advices (불가산 명사입니다) to me when I want to buy something. For example, when we went shopping I considered to was considering whether I should buy a new skirt with a ribbon. Our fashion style is similar and we like wearing simple skirts and shirts. (내용이 반복되고 있습니다) I wanted to decide whether I have to should buy it or not after I wore the skirt, but the store prohibited me from wearing trying on clothes when I didn't buy it. I wanted to buy it, but I was really worried about if that it is not would not look good on match to me. My friends said that the this skirt is was not our style, and recommended other another one to me. I didn't did not wear it but it looks fit on me (해석이 어려운 어색한 문장입니다). Finally I bought the skirt which my friend recommended. I was satisfied with the new clothes due thanks to her choice.
On top of that, my friends are an objective person. Actually I can't do not believe the advertisements on TV or Internet easily, because the things that I bought from the ad on Internet have a side effect. My friend's character are is honest and frank, so I can trust her reviews about things. She always tell story frankly about my attitude or appearance without bad emotion, so I can trust her freely. (내용이 반복되고 있습니다) For example, In my experience, when a the new lipstick was released by the a popular cosmetic shop. , I hoped to buy it and boasted it to others. When I said this to my friend, she disagreed with my opinion. She already bought and used the lipstcik, but it didn't did not have a good color and texture testure. She thought that this the lipstick do did not have high value as the company is popular (해석이 안되는 어색한 표현입니다). She pushed me to not to buy it , and she also said the reason why I wanted to buy this is was for boasting, it which was not a good idea. I did not didn't have many interests in cosmetics while she was an expert on it, so I trusted her words saying and believed it. The main reason why I can believed her is was because she always gives trust and helpful advices to me.
To sum up, my friend knows me very well and she is an honest person. In this regard, her recommendation has the greatest impact on my choice when I consider a major purchases.
Score: 11 Comments: - 구조가 잘 잡혀있습니다. - 제시된 이유는 적절하나 본인의 이야기로 내용이 많이 집중되어있습니다. 질문은 사람들 전체를 두고 봤을 때 무엇이 가장 큰 영향을 주는지를 묻는 것이기 때문에 조심해주셔야 합니다. - 불필요한 문장들이 많습니다. - 어색한 표현들이 많습니다. (Actually, 등) 스피킹 느낌이 강합니다. - informal한 표현들이 많습니다. - 문법 실수들이 있습니다. - 라이팅에서 축약형은 쓰지 않습니다. didn't - did not - 수고하셨습니다! |