▶ Your Answer : Many people nowadays overuse the social networking services such as Instagram and Facebook. It is obvious that there is are a lot of concerns about using smartphone and computers too much. However, I still strongly believe that there are more advantages to use social networking services. For the most, it is very useful to expand my social network which is one of the most important factors to build my relationship with other people. Social networking services allow us to meet new people even who is those living in different countries. By chatting with foreign friends who is are living far away in social network, we can experience new kinds of culture. It also gives me a chance to learn different languages by teaching each others everyday. Form From my own experience, I have used one of social networks called Hello Pal. I can meet met many different people from there and make made friends easily by chatting with them. I feel like I became a really close friend with them because we contacted to each other everyday, and we also shared our own thoughts and feelings. In the social network, people are all connected to each other, and because of that, we can easily find new friends. This sharply have a gives big advantages in our life.
Secondly, social networking is very informative. People usually forget how much information they get from social network everyday. We usually call the internet as the window of the knowledge. We can easily werch search up the internet whenever we need to learn about something more. Many different people upload their own opinion on the social network, and that gives us a new point of view which is we can never get that much in the real life. For example, my mom always get a new recipe from the social network. Thanks for that, we can enjoy many different food everyday. If there was no internet, it would probably be more difficult to make different styles of food because my mom does not know how to make them. Social network is very useful and gives us a lot of information. I strongly believe that nobody can live without the information from social network services.
To sum up, It seems clear that social network service is really helpful to expand our relationship with other people and get a new information. Although there is still concern about abusing social network services, we can find out the way to use social network services better than now.
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