▶ Your Answer : Some people think that the news media is a reliable source of unbiased information. However, in my opinion, we should accept it with criticism for two reasons: media corporations are often connected with political parties and author’s opinion cannot be completely excluded. To begin with, the news media is often related with political groups because of many reasons such as their chief’s political view or money. It is obvious that news media has immense effect on public opinion, so it is tantalizing method for parties. Connected with chief’s political view, media can be easily manipulated by revealing only articles that might help them. For example, recently, South Korea was loud with political corruptions between Medias and political parties. The criticism in the people was they were too much connected with each other and media was exploited unfairly. After several investigations, it was revealed as true, and the president had to get impeachment. On top of that, we cannot think that articles or news are free from author’s opinion. When authors write their articles, they tend to lean on their background knowledge. To be specific, this knowledge must be based on their point of view of some issues, and this makes authors write their news with bias. They There was a survey, conducted by Gallup with over 200 respondents, to determine if authors are free from their perspectives when they write materials. Over 60% of respondents said that it is hard for them to be liberated from their point of view. And they also commented that they cannot exclude all biased sources even at the start of writing. The reason was revealed that they tend to gather their information based on their preferred website or analogous people, and this process cannot be impartial because these sources are also unbiased as well. To sum up, the news media is often related with some political parties and authors’ opinion cannot excluded completely. In this regard, I firmly believe that people have to view medias’ information with criticism.
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