■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer
▶ Topic :
Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparetns were children.
▶ Your Answer :
Today, a lot of young people are experiencing fierce competitions to get a good job and good grades. Some people believe that lives are becoming more difficult as time goes by. However, in my opinion, today’s life is easier than the life in 50 years ago. There are two subsequent reasons for this.
First and foremost, our country’s economy has developed a lot compared to the past. To be specific, all families lived in financial straits and people struggled to make their livings. For this reason, even children had to work to make money and help their parents after schools. However, the economy has advanced a lot in our country. There is no difficulty in making one’s living and people’s lives become much convenient in comparison to the lives in the past. Today’s people have a lot of free time and enjoy a wide variety of hobbies. According to an article that I read a few month ago, the GDP has increased by 40 percent compared to the 1980. (GDP of which country?) Besides, in 1990, the average amount of free time which a person had was only one hour in a week. However, today, the average amount of free time is more than 5 hours in a week. As a result, the industry which is related to people’s cultural lives such as sports and arts has developed a lot compared to the past. These results show that today’s life becomes much comfortable and people enjoy their lives compared to the past.
On top of that, our country’s technology has developed a lot. To explain, there was no the Internet, computers or cellphones in the past. If people had a problem in their daily lives, they had to solve it on their own. However, thanks to the advent of a lot of technologies, we can search any information on the Internet whenever we want. In addition, the Internet allows people to have access to tremendous amount of information easily. With diverse technologies, we can solve our daily problems easily, which makes our lives much easier than the lives in the past. There was a survey which was conducted by a group of engineering majors with 300 university students as respondents. The survey questions were about how they deal with their daily lives. More than 65 percent of respondents replied that they usually search information using smart phones in order to handle their daily problems. Majority of respondents said that the quality of their lives improved a lot thanks to their smart phones which help them to find any information.
To sum up, in the past, people had no time to spare because they had to make money in order to make their livings. Moreover, the development of technology has changed our daily lives significantly in today’s society. For these reasons, I firmly believe that todays’ lives are much comfortable than the lives in the past.
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