I do believe countries should not isolate themselves from the world. It is an era of globalization, which means countries are all connected to one another. Information throughout the world is being shared And and one country alone has no power to the global economy.( is powerless in a global economy) (and로는 문장을 시작하지 않습니다)
First reason I think that countries should not isolate themselves from the world is that it is becoming more difficult to be isolated in this world, where information from half way around the globe(몰라서 묻는건데요 half way around the globe 가 뭐 지구 반대편이런 말인가요?) is available all over the place.
개인적으로 전 간단히 쓰는편이라, 그냥 정보화시대에 살고있다라고 쓰면 안될까요? ^^ㅋㅋ
it's more difficult to be isolated in the information-oriented society/era..........
This flow of information became possible by the use of Internet(capitalize 해주시구요).
(or you can say; Internet allowed people to communicate with each others worldwidely(all over the world), sharing lots of information online....) Internet has changed many ways of our lives in many ways(aspects). One of the biggest impacts is the fact that anyone can use it. A person who lives in a very restricted, autocratic country can see any information on the internet or post his or her opinion anytime with freedom of speech. Therefore, as a country it is hard to be isolated from the rest of the world, because no control over the flow of information seems possible.(as long as there is Internet with free flow of information, it's not possible an absolute isolation to exist in this world.) This ubiquitous feature of the internet makes the world more connected than ever.
Secondly, isolation will make the country less competitive. There is one prominent country which is so isolated from the rest of the world. It is the North Korea which is a communist country. It has been isolated more than half a century by itself or by others. Even the rest of the world hasd applied put on economic sanctions against over the country. As a result, the economy has gone so bad and now most people live poorly. It seems they live lives in a 60’s economic condition life style. In most fields including science, economy and politics, they are far behind its neighbors.
Final reason I feel that countries should engage other countries is that without those engagement, no efficient trade is possible. Nowadays, countries tend to have associations to fight under the fast-growing economy. One example of those associations is Korean-American FTA (Free trade area-association 아닌가요). Although it has not been successfully passed in the Congress yet in both countries, it gives us a meaningful message about how important it is to ally. Under this contract between the countries, they reduce the trade tax between them making other players in the market much weaker and less competitive. This is becoming a trend in the world. Countries look like that they try to make a strong team to be successful in the game of world economy. Under this circumstance, having no country to be teamed up means it will be left behind in this fierce global market.
As this essay demonstrated, countries should not isolate themselves from the world. Not only it is becoming difficult to be isolated in this world of information, but also isolation gives so many disadvantages to survive under the harsh global environment.
안녕하세요. dd_princess입니다 ^^
저번 글은, 다른 분들께서 많이 첨삭을 해주셨길래, 그냥 스킵 했습니다 ^^
우선 I think, I 로 시작해서 쓰는 문장들 ,잘 쓰시지 않는게 더 낫지 않을까 싶구요;
매끄럽지 않은 문장들, 그리고 쓸데없는 말이 덕지덕지 붙어있는것들, 고치고 버리시구요,
굳럭.^^
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