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The expression "Never, never give up" means to keep trying and never stop working for your goals. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people might believe that if you have absolutely impossible goals, you have to abandon these goals as quickly as possible. Although there are some reasons that I can convince from their opinion, I am certain that if you have some goals, you must strive to acquire your goals. This is because your effort offers honor to you and increase contribution to society.
Most of all, if you strive constantly to obtain your purpose, someday neighbor or even world recognize your effort. Namely, you will become an honorable man as long as you work always hard to obtain your goals. It is not important for you to evaluate whether you achieve your goals or not. The most important thing is how makes many effort to achieve your goals. For example, suppose that you want to solve everything of black hole. Of course I don't know well whether you can solve this problem during your whole life or not, however, even if you didn't solve this problem in your whole life, it is never useless effort. Someday next generation will use your knowledge that you found some principle about black hole. Finally the world will recognize you as excellent man.
Furthermore, your effort contributes to society. The more difficult and dangerous things, the less the people try and strive. For example let's think about effort of Wright brother. Their achievement is what everybody knows and also everybody knows that it was very dangerous at that time. However they never gave up their dream that human can fly into blue sky and immense tries was existed. Although the distance of their virgin flight was only 26m and flight time was just 59 sec, present time we can travel that is possible to go to universe through their huge efforts and tries. Even if your working is somewhat difficult and hard, your achievement will makes power that open new field.
In conclusion I agree with this statement that you never abandon your goals and strive constantly to obtain your purposes for the reason that I mentioned above.