3. 선생님의 페이는 학생의 성적에 따라 줘야한다
Measuring teachers’ wage is sometimes controversial because of absence of its exact standard. Some people might argue that it is unfair to offer payment by students’ GPA, since grade is ambiguous standard in evaluating wage. However, in my opinion, it definitely advantage to provide payment measured by students’ score in terms of improving education’s quality. There are two reasons to support this main idea: in order to obtain chance to promote teachers and focus on priority to students.
To begin with, students can benefit from different payment because of motivating teachers. Economic stimulus is very effective way to provoke teacher to concentrate on education. In order to get more profits, teacher would struggle in trying to improve students’ ability. For example, when our school adopted incentive institution, my mathematic teacher changed his method of teaching to instruct easily. He used many tools in order to explain Pythagorean theory. Thanks to his effort, students in my class could get enhanced score, and the teacher could achieve his goal, increased payment.
On top of that, students’ grade is the most significant factor in both teachers and students. Since the primary role of a teacher is to aid students in taking good score for successful future, it is reasonable to regard students’ grade as a measurement to decide payment. For instance, my friend went to school which considered chant contest as important. Teacher assuming my friends’ class force students to practice very hard, since school would award profitable prize, if they won. Although they finally won the contest and received the prize, my friend regretted because of fail to enter the university with most classmates. As a result, the teacher was punished for the responsibility to disrupt students’ class atmosphere. Therefore, motivation related with score is crucial for students’ future success.
To summarize, I strongly believe that producing different payment from student’s grade lead to positive results, not only stirring teacher to help students more efficiently but also realizing the importance of study. Thus, I recommend that it is necessary for schools to seriously enter the payment policy.
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