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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic:What causes conflict? Is conflict inevitable? Is conflict always negative? How can conflicts be resolved? | |
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In an entertainment business suffer lot of conflict. Both 2PM and TVXQ have serious, huge conflict. 2PM has problem about their withdrawn member, Jae beom. TVXQ suffer from throes as unfair contract and suit with their entertainment agency company.
Boy group 2PM and their fandom has trouble. Their member ‘Jae beom’ drop out of 2PM seeing that he wrote his opinion belittled Korea in 'myspace'. It causes social issue and spread out to political circles. But hottest, their fandom, declare a boycotte and behave briskly. 2PM without Jae beom and JYP, their entertainment agency company, hold meeting about Jae beom. They said improbable, disappointed, infuriating story to their fandom. Moreover, their corruption and privacy are become disclosed. Most fans wounded by them and leaving them even people who obessing them. It is not inevitable trouble. When 2PM didn't exclude them, this situation didn't happen. Also, it can't be resolved because people already avoid them.
Next, TVXQ and some of Super Junior member have trouble with their entertainment agency company, SM. TVXQ's member Hero, Micky and Xiah sue SM suddenly. Cassiopeia, their fandom gets shock. But they active hardly for them as soon as possible by preparing lots of countermeasure. They gather signatures on a national scale and didn't buy or use anything from SM like cd, dvd, karaoke, restaurant. Cassiopleia translate document for Japanese, Chinese, English about didn't buy anything from SM and unfair contract. SM gets mortal blow and also take a measure in that mainpulating the media and stock prices. But, ultimately Hero, Micky, Xiah and Casiopeia won the suit. They just wait for sueing major problem. The reason why these problem happened is SM making unfair contract at first as use that they are rookie. It is inevitable and positive problem. This is very old and chronic disease in whole entertainment business. So when they won suit, it will be cause very positive influence. | |
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