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■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Lately, it's been a common phenomena(이건 phenomenon의 복수예요) that corporates spend a fortune to either to protect the environment or to support the arts. The advent of a concept, 'social enterprise' implicitly illustrate that corporates, once considered as greedy predators, have been realized the importance of continuable management and contribution to the society. In my opinion, however, focusing on environmental issues would be the better choice for social enterprises in terms of the extent of beneficiary and future competitiveness of the company itself.
First of all, beneficiary of protecting the environment is wider than that of supporting the arts.(wider r가 여기서 뭐죠?)The benefits of supporting the arts might be limited in only for people someone who produce the arts or are interested in the arts. The current issues of environment, however, are closely linked together. The term, 'Butterfly effect' appositely reflects the idea by pointing out the possibility that movements of a butterfly in south america could result in huge environmental change in Africa. Conversely, if corporates take actions to protect the environment in Asia, it would be possible to expect to see its positive consequence in South America. Thus, small changes taken by a single company to protect environment could result in huge consequences which can benefits the whole world.
In addition, protecting the environment also helps corporates to improve their own competence. The hottest issue in recent business world is 'pro-environmental product and service'. Since international organizations such as UN are trying to regulate the amount of emission of CO2 and other pollutants, it has been mandatory for companies to develop technologies for the environment(develop environment friendly technologies). For instance, GM which was once the biggest car company in the world finally collapsed because it ignored needs to develop fuel-efficiency cars. In this sense, taking actions to protect the environment hasve two advantages for companies. They can conduct the research & development which is are essential to develop cutting-edge technologies while they support the pro-environmental actions by investing money on the environmental issues related with their business. And, at least they can build an image of pro-envirionmental corporate by investing money on into the environmental issues.
In conclusion, both protecting environments and supporting the arts would spawn positive outcome in the society. In my opinion, however, the advantage of spending limited resources on environmental issues would outweigh that of supporting the arts. | |
오늘은 여기까지 첨삭을 해야겠습니다 ㅠ
어지러워 ㅠ ㅋㅋㅋㅋ
도움이 된다니 다행이군요.
우선, 조그만 미스테이크 빼곤 overall괜찮아요 ^^
그리고 콘쿨루젼에선 되도록이면however 를 안쓰는게 낫지 않을까..싶은데요 ㅋㅋ
나중에 시간이 별로없다면 콘쿨을 저렇게 그냥 써도 되겠지만
시간이 있다면 더 좋게, 다른말로 만들어서 쓰는것도 괜찮겠네요.^^