■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic :getting a job which you work with other people is better than getting a job in which you work alone. | |
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There might be different opinions regarding whether getting a job which you can work with others is better than getting a job that you can work without co-worker. Some might argue that it is more convenient for workers to work without considering supervisors and co-workers. However, I strongly disagree with this statement for the following two reasons. First, they can generate higher performance with other workers. Also, they can develop their social skills by working with a group.
To begin with, making higher work performance is easier with other workers. Some say that internet makes it possible for workers with home-working system to work well with enormous information in the Net. However, this is not true. Since this information is not reliable and specialized, using this information is of no use to excel over workers with a group. Also, there is synergy effect that cooperating with other people can make better results which surpass the sums of each member's performance. This is because when they work together, they can interact with one another by gaining advices and helps, picking up peers' mistakes or disadvantages. According to the research conducted by Korean National Research Center, group teams' performances in marketing competition is two time higher than individuals' performances on average. Also, in the competition, all prizes were dominated by group teams. It means that working with others can enable people to do more than they expected.
On top of that, workers can socialize with their co-workers. Nowadays, in the fast-changing society, social skills are very important skills as compared to other skills because we meet a huge number of people a day and dealing with human networks is very helpful for us to succeed. So, working with group of people is a way for people to develop their social skills as well as broaden their human relationships. Let me give my example. When I was in university, during summer vacation, I worked at Kolon Market, one of the biggest hypermarket in Korea. At that time, I did not have any kinds of social groups or part-time jobs except for school friend gathering. However, I had to work with senior workers, endure a lot of picky customers, and cooperate with supervisors and peers to achieve today's goal sell. After three month, I realized that I learned a lot about human relationship and the importance of social skills. This experience is very valuable for me to teach me a lot as well as earn some money. If I had worked alone during my school time, I could not have been able to develop my social skills
To conclude, I believe that working with other people is more efficient and helpful than working alone. First of all, workers make high efficiency with co-workers thanks to synergy effect. In addition, they can learn important social skills by working together. | |
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