■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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To have a successful life in school, peers are more influential than parents. | |
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Nowadays, Since grades at school are influential for many social activities, such as getting a job or even a marriage, success in a school life also leads a successful life in a society. Thus someone says that parents should positively influence their children. But, to have a successful life in school, it is more important for students to be positively affected by friends. There are two reasons why peers are more important than their parents for school life: students have their school life with their peers not their parents, and their friends understand them more than parents.
To begin with, students get along with their friends in school. It is obvious that students contact with their friends much than their parents in school. Therefore good peers are the main factor for a successful school life. For example, when I was in my middle school, there was a student, whose name is John. He was a laborious boy, he did all things well. However, in his senior year, he suspended from the school. I was surprised by the event, and one of my friends told me that he abused drugs with a friend who already was a bad boy. That time, I desperately realized that good peers are essential for a successful school life.
In addition, Friends are more likely to understand their friends well than their parents. Friends share their school lives no matter it is happy or sad. Thus they can apprehend each other’s situations. This can relieve students’ stress from school lives and will lead to a successful school life. For instance, when I was in my high school, I had had a large stress from exams, but my parents just compelled me to study. Of course, it increased my stress, and I gave up the several exams. However, when I’m really stressed out because of studying, my friends suggested me to hang out together to relieve stress. That time, I got a straight A except for just one subject; I studied without any stress.
In brief, for the reasons that students do their school lives with their friends, and peers can comprehend their minds, peers are more influential to students’ successful school life than their parents. | | |
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