1. The ability to read and write is more important today than it was in the past.
Writing and reading is the key to a successful and independent life in the contemporary society. Look for instance to the uncountable blogs that(that : where보다는 that 이 더 괜찮지 않나요?) the people express their opinions to tell their friends through the internet what they were observing on the weekend or to publish political matters(things는 약간 informal 한것 같은 느낌이) like violations of the human rights in china during the Olympic games. From my point of view reading and writing is obviously more important than it was in the past because most of the jobs(I can't get the relationship btw blogs and job/ you mean, the jobs what a human has made untill now? then you need more fomal word than 'job' but I couldn't guess it now) are knowledge based nowadays and it will help you to become a independent thinking and acting person! I will outline my points in detail in the following. -> I got lost the point what you gonna say at the end of pharagraph.T^T is my reading comprehension problems?
To begin with, do you know the sociological term “knowledge based working world-> a knowledge-base world or society or economy? working world가 어감이 괜히....들어본적이 없어서.ㅠㅠ” If this is not the case, let me sum it up for you: Most of the jobs fifty or sixty years ago required strength and manpower, because the majority of jobs were placed in the agriculture. Nowdays, however, the social and technology change jobs to light. As a result, even though there are people who still work in the heavy industry such as mine or agriculture, most of the people work at the places where are based on specific knowledge, like writing articles for newspapers or use excel for calculation and consulting jobs(예를 더 멋진걸로 쓰면 어떨까여? 계산을 위해 엑셀을 쓰는게 별로 지식기반으로 보여지지 않아서요. ). These jobs have obviously the requirement that that you can write, speak und read fluently, otherwise your chances to have a good job(chance for what?)at the labour market will not be too high.
Furthermore, the ability to write and read will help you to become more independent. For instance, look back at your childhood. Your parents surely told you all the time things you could not know because you were not able to read and write.(haha, 저 이거 뭔말인지 모르겠어요.T^T) In the modern society, everything is more complex then it was for example hundred years before. Especially, the international relations between nations (여기서 and nations 생략해도 나라들간에! 이런 억양이 느껴지나요?)are getting more complex and to know what is going in(there -> in what? where? ) you have to use your reading skills and furthermore(why did you write 'furthermore' at here?), to publish your opinion you have indeed to write(should practice to be good at the writing?) . So (-And) this ability will make you an independent and critical thinking person!
In conclusion, to cope with this complicatied world(음.. complicated society를 더 많이 쓰지 않나요?) you have to use your writing and reading skills and to be successful in a competitive and keen labour market, you should develop them constantly.
헐, 저의 험블오피니언으로 적어봤어요.ㅠ_ㅠ
이건 제 연습차 적은거니... 제 에세이 보면 아시지만, 저는 초보 토플러랍니다.ㅋㅋ
아 더 페이 어탠션하고싶은데
제가 지금 막 저녁식사에 가봐야되서요.
그래도 이거 보는데 한시간 걸렸다는, 머리좀 쓰다듬어 달라는...;)
근데 님 글 진짜 잘쓰시네요
와.. 저도 매일 하나씩 쓰면 이렇게 됩니까?