With the help of the internet, students can learn more effectively. Agree/ disagree?
It is often said today that the world is becoming a single web entity as the internet connects every part of the globe. Under such circumstance, students are benefiting greately as the internet provides various means of more effective learning. Students became able to access tremendous quantity of information online. Moreover, they can even access lectures on the web. 아무래도 토플에서는 채점자가 이해하기쉽게 intro 에다가 자기가 agree 나 disagree 를 할지를 한문장이라도 써주시고 에세이 시작하는것도 좋을것같네요;
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To begin with, the web connection which extends all over the world provides a vast quantity of information to students. Students are now able to gain much more various information online through websites of any country. As they can obtain a large amount of useful information online, often they can often save time to go to the library to search for books. For instance, I most certainly get most of the resources for my papers online. But last year when I went to India as an exchange student and had to write my paper, I confronted so much trouble because the internet situation was so bad there. It was nearly impossible to go online so I had to visit the library thousands of times in order to search for books, and what's more, the information from the books was not sufficient either. From the experience, I wholeheartedly felt that the internet is a tremendously useful tool that makes learning most effective.
Furthermore, students are now even able to hear lectures online. This not only saves time of traveling to the place where the lecture is held, but also is very much efficient as they can manage their time themselves and decide when to take the lecture. Moreover, they can even go back and hear it over if they have anything(any lectures/points)-되도록이면 thing들어간거는 줄여주는게; they did not catch. From my personal opinion, I believe that having an established a good system of online lectures is the very first reason that makes me proud of my university. From the semester I started taking online courses, I could save huge amount of time I used to spend on commuting, and I could engage in other productive activities during this time. Also, I felt that it is a very effective way of learning because I can listen to the lecture in my quiet room without any distraction that could happen in classrooms.
To sum up, I definitely agree with the opinion that the internet has provided a very effective means of learning. First, students are now able to obtain a large amount of various information online. Second, online lecture s are is very a effective way of learning. The internet revolution of the contemporary era is contributing greately to the enhancement of humans' intellectual ability in these respects.
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