First, the lecturer points that using incentives to attract businesses will not expand the tax revenue available for local investment. This is because as As (this is because는 적절하지 않는 표현 입니다) more corporations relocate to an area to get incentives, the income of the local government does not increase tax, so total tax does not increase. This refutes the author's point that using incentives to attract businesses will expand the tax revenue available for local investment.
Finally, the point made by the lecturer is that using incentives to attract businesses will not be beneficial to the local environment. This is because when green companies enter the local market, green factories also cause a small amount of pollution. So, there are more pollution than before. This is different from the passage's view that using incentives to attract businesses will be beneficial to the local environment.
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