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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic : Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should not make important decisions alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Some people want others to be included together in decision making process, whereas other people place higher priority on making important decisions by themselves. As far as I am concerned, a person should decide what to choose among a lot of options by themselves. This is important because people feel less remorse when their decisions turn out to be wrong, and they are able to make more optimal decisions when they do it by themselves.
To begin with, those who make decision by their own hands feel less sorry when the results of decisions prove to be bad. People can accept the outcome caused by their own decisions. However, if people followed others's opnion, they will feel very bad about the results. For instance, when I had to apply for the early-decision of the top-ranked university in Korea, my parents were very nervous if I would not be accepted. My parents advised me to submit the application for the second-ranked college in the nation. I followed their opnion, and when I got accepted from the(latter) second -rankedone(university), I felt remorse of(about) not applying for the top-ranked college.
In addition, better decisions will be yielded when people are in chage of decision making alone. No one will help them at the final moment that they have to choose one option out of many. Thus, they will take more resposibility and put more efforts on the decision making. For example, when my familiy went on a trip to Japan, my brother always whined about the place that my mother wanted to visit. Therefore, my parents gave the travel guide book to my brother. He took time to choose where to visit, and he was satisfied with the place he chosed from then.(afterward)
To sum up, it is necessary for people to make important decisions by alone. People feel better even if the decisions turn out to be wrong, and they will make the better decisions since they take more responsibilty. In this way, people will be able to have more benefits in their lives.
| 잘쓰셨어요^^ 그렇게 자신이 고치는게 더 기억에 잘남을거예요 ^^ |
ㅡ뭐 양과 질이 다 된다면 좋겟죠 ㅋㅋㅋ
근데 토플에서 주어진 길이(단어수)정도만 되면 충분해요.
너무 길게 쓸려고도 안해두 되고요 그 정도만.... 이게 바탕이되고
이제 질로 가야죠 ㅋㅋㅋ 그걸로 에세이의레벨이 결정되는거니까요 ^^
어떤 사람들은 그냥 proofreading안하고 바로 계속 쓴다음에 내서 점수잘 받기도 하죠;
그런사람들은 이제 기본적으로 바탕이 된사람들이구요;
아직 그래머나 그런게 부족한사람들은 proofreading이 필요하겠죠 ^^
결론은, 미니뭄 길이정도는 쓰시고, 이제 고칠수있을만큼 고치는거죠 ^^;;;
이번주 시험 잘보셨음 좋겠어요 ^^
시험보고나서 잘봤는지 알려주세요~ㅋㅋ 궁금하니까; 저 궁금한거 못참는 사람입니다 ^^
anyway gud luck and keeeeep it up