Many people attend colleges or universities. Some people think that going(attending) to college or university is essential way to go through in their life. Why Most people think it like this way. There are several reasons.
First, I think that the a person graduated university or college looks like a person that who has have high quality.To attend (To get into) For go into university or college, we need good grade or have to pass some test. So the people going to university or college is considered that they have a good ability. Because they passed some qualifications.
Second, if someone goes to any college or university, the person can learn many things specially. Most people have a talants and they want to learn about it more detaily. (in detail) College or university gives us so much opportunities that are learning. I also wanted to learn about theology, so I applied to applicated the college of theology. The result, I could realize can realized many things about theology.
Finally, Thing going to college or university can be good career for our future job.(>>Attending a college or a university can help people to make their resume look better..) Learning in college or university isn't only knowlogy. At there we can learn and experient about society. Also we learn harmony with different people. It will be really good career for our future job. For example, I experiented many different friend. They aren't like me and thier ideas are not isn't like my idea. So I felt very difficult, but I became could understand that. This career helped my part time job. Due to the experience I could kind to my customer more and more. College and university are really good place that can learning society.
In conclusion, Most people want to go to college or university because they can learn specially things and get good career for thier future job by meeting various people. In addition, they can be considered the high level person. These are the reansons that many people go to college or university.
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