▶ Your Answer : Live in a small town or a big city? Which could be a better choice?
The answer depends on individual differences, and logically, people from different backgrounds have varied choices Depending on the different background people live in, people have different opinion concerning with living in a small town. Because of its benefits to people, some people prefer to live in a big city, while others prefer to live in a small town think differently. The way I see it, it is more beneficial to live in a big city rather than a small town. Personally, I am inclined to believe that its pros offset its cons. The benefits are viewed in three different ways below. for the following two subsequent reasons.
One of the key reasons is that a big city has well organized public transport systems To begin with, big cities have well developed public transportation. To be specific, it is easy to get around a city without driving. People who do not have a car might have some difficulty to move around when they live in a small town where there are no well-organized public transport systems in moving around the city which cannot be found on rural area. Every day morning to me for instance, subway and bus make me possible to go to university I took public transportation to go to school. If I live in a small town, it is much harder to go to university every day.
Another important aspect of this is that a big city has a better hospital than a small town Furthermore, big cities have more hospitals. In other words, when I me or my family get an emergency situation like a severe car crash or stroke, a big hospital that equipped with various kind of medical equipment would be helpful for quick first aid. For instance, when I was a child, I got a car accident. Fortunately, there is a university hospital near the place where the accident occurs. So I could go to the emergency room very quickly, and I can get treatment very fast.
Conclusively, the unparalleled privilege of this standpoint is that a big city is more convenient than a small town. To put it again, a big city has lots of stores than a small town. One example could be convenience stores. If you want to buy something to eat or drink, you can just go to a convenience store nearby to your house If people want to buy something, people can go to convenient store (독립형 에세이에서는 you를 서술하면 안됩니다). But in a small town generally, a convenience store is far from your house
Looking at all the statements above, I am in prefer to live in a big city.
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