■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
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▶ Your Answer: People usually are not satisfied with what they have but they want to be satisfied with their current states. Albeit the human always consider satisfaction with what they own as an virtue, dissatisfaction is the inducement of the human development. Furthermore, recent scientific and psychological studies show that satisfying with what they already have is impossible goal. In this sense, I believe the humans cannot be satisfied with what they have for the scientific and psychological reasons.
To begin with, satisfaction (대/소문자) is not a permanent concept. Because satisfaction is a relative criterion (단/복수), they cannot sustain their satisfaction as long as other people achieve more things or get distinguishable things. In this sense, people cannot be satisfied as long as other people develop (develop what?). For example, a research conducted by Harvard University in 2011 shows that they do not satisfy with what they already have. In this research, researchers gathered 70 of children and gave each of them different toys and observed them. The result was quite interesting. They did not satisfy with their own toys and tried to steal other people’s toy although they have each of toys. This research shows that people always want something more or something different.
On top of that, people do not satisfy with their own things because of genetic reasons. Because satisfaction is the state of happiness with their current state and happiness is the inducement of accomplishment, they must soon be dissatisfied with their current state because their gene demands them to develop continuously for their surviving. (여기 이 문장이 너무 깁니다. 짧고 간결하게 유지해주세요) In this sense, it is impossible to satisfy with their current state because of genetic reasons. For instance, a genetic research from MIT conducted in 2013 shows that gene is the reason why the human cannot be satisfied. with their own things. In this research, they mutated a gene of a rat to be satisfied with its current states and released it to a cage with other rats. Surprisingly, the rat did not eat those because that rat did not compete with other rats. Few days later, he died because of the insufficient supply of foods. As this research shows, we cannot be satisfied with what we own because of genes. (this whole paragraph가 이해가 잘 안 됩니다. 쥐가 현재에 만족하도록 유전자가 바뀌었는데 안 먹어서 죽었다는 건가요? 설득력이 상당히 떨어집니다)
To sum up, people cannot be satisfied with what they own. This is because satisfaction is not a permanent concept and genetic reasons prohibit (주어 동사 불일치) us not to satisfy with our current situations. In this sense, I firmly believe that people always want something more or different. |
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1. because로 문장을 시작하는 방법은 바람직하지 않습니다.
due to the fact that~ 등으로 대체해주세요.
2. 만족하다 라는 뜻의 satisfy는 be satisfied, is satisfied, are satisfied 등의
수동태로 나타냅니다.
satisfy + 사람 목적어 가 나오면 만족시키다 라는 뜻으로 쓰입니다.
3. 내용이 너무 추상적이고 모호하게 작성되어서 전달력과 설득력이 떨어지는 부분이 있습니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*