▶ Your Answer : People go to school for many different reasons. However, I believe that the most important reason for this is to learn something. This is because all people have interests in what they want to learn about, and learning from an expert is better than studying alone. >space To begin with, all people have their own interests in knowing which they want to know more about things they like. This is why students join universities where they can specialize in a certain field. It is also widely known that every human being craves learning. to learn. I know this from my personal experience. My uncle majored in economics and was working in a company associated with the field. However, he became really interested in statistics and terribly wanted to learn more about it. So, he quit his work and started to attend a university to major in statistics. He is now in the doctor’s program to learn more deeply about it. >space On the top of that, learning from an expert is better than studying by oneself. Listening to a professor’s lecture makes it easier for a student to understand a topic. Students can also be insured that what they learn is correct. 주제가 묻는 것은 '학교에 가는 이유'이므로 혼자서 배우는 것보다 나은 이유만 설명하기보다 '그래서 학교에 간다'라는 점까지 간단히 연결해주면 더 좋을 것 같아요. A group of students who attend Oxford university conducted a research about why people attend school. In order to do this, they conducted a survey targeting university students. Not surprisingly, most students said that they entered university because self-study is hard, and lessons from specialists contain accurate information. >space To sum up, most people go to school for two reasons. First, they want to learn something. Second, learning from an expert is preferable to self studying.
Comment : 주제에 맞게 답안을 잘 생각해주셨습니다. '기본적으로 더 배우고자 하는 흥미가 있다'라는 점과 '전문가에게 배울 수 있어서'라는 이유를 '학교'라는 시설과 연결지어 더 구체적으로 풀어내서 <학교에 가는 이유>로서 설득력을 더할 수 있으면 좋을 것 같습니다. 수고 많으셨습니다~! Independent Writing Rubrics Score 3.5/5 An essay at this level largely accomplishes all of the following : - Addresses the topic and task well, though some points may not be fully elaborated (문제의 요구사항을 대부분 잘 해결함) - Is generally well organized and well developed, using appropriate and sufficient explanations, exemplifications and/or details (적절하고 충분한 설명과 예시를 사용하며 대체로 글의 구성과 전개방식이 양호함) - Displays unity, progression and coherence, though it may contain occasional redundancy, digression, or unclear connections (중복된 내용이나 관련 없는 내용, 불분명한 연결이 있을 수 있으나 통일성, 연속성, 일관성이 드러남) - Displays facility in the use of language, demonstrating syntactic variety and range of vocabulary, though it will probably have occasional noticeable minor errors in structure, word form or use of idiomatic language that do not interfere with meaning (글의 의미를 손상시키지 않는 범위 내에서 사소한 문장구조, 단어 형태 오류를 보일 수 있으나, 전반적으로 어휘・통사적 다양성을 갖춘 유창한 언어 사용을 보임)
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