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I totally agree with the statement that
movies tell a lot about the country for three reasons. (인트로에 적합하지 않습니다. 자기 주장만 나타내는 것 보다는 한 단락을 서술하는 것이 좋습니다. 왜 이러한 주제가 중요한지에 대한 설명을 하는 것이 인트로의 목적입니다)
First, movie scenes show various landscape and outlook of the country. There are not many people who’ve who have been to Coasta Rica. So it is natural to say “I
don’t know about Costarica well”. However, what if every people who have seen saw the
movie “Jurassic Park” realize realizes that the movie was taken in Coasta Rica? Hundreds
of million people who saw the movie wouldn’t would not feel that they have no idea about
the country.
Second, movies often include important historic event about the
country. In Korea, there are a lot of movies which dealt with Korea War. It was a very
important event which happened in 1950 and affected Korea until now. The
country is now one and only divided nation on earth. Over 1 million people were
separated with their family at that time and many of them never met each other again.
There is a famous movie named “Brothership”, and this was shown over more than
20 countries.
Finally, movies appear how
people live in the country. There are few movies without
actors. They talk, laugh, and live with each other. For instance, it is easy to
watch a movie that unmarried couples live together in French movie which is not
common in Japan. Furthermore, the style of humors they make is differ from
country to country.
For these reasons, I believe movies show many parts of the country. Fair: 17~23 점수: 20 너무 구체적이지 않는 독립형 에세이입니다. 특히 이러한 부분들은 인트로와 결론에서 많이 보여집니다. 인트로와 결론을 한 문장으로 끝내는 것은 좋지 않습니다. 또한 이유를 세 가지를 서술하였으나 세 가지 이유 모두 구체적이지 않습니다. 다 약간의 이론만 설명할 뿐 왜 주제에 대해서 이러한 이유가 중요한지를 서술하지 않습니다. 따라서 세 가지 이유를 서술하기 위해서는 좀 더 구체적인 설명을 서술하시는 것을 추천합니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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