▶ Your Answer :
The lecturer argues that the hypothesis that the Etruscans migrated
from Turkey is hard to believe. This contradicts the reading passage’s claim
that the hypothesis is true. First Frist,
the lecturer claims that the DNA evidence cannot explain the roots of the Etruscans.
This is because the analyzed DNA is the one from over 1000 years ago. So, it
could be damaged. Also because of the things that has contacted the bones, the
DNA likely to be contaminated. 앞 문장하고 결국 같은 내용이니까 생략해도 될 것 같아요. This casts doubts on the reading passage’s claim
that the DNA evidence indicates that the Etruscans have Turkish roots.
Next,
the lecturer argues that the language used by Etruscans does not support the civilization’s
Turkish roots. Many different languages have similar alphabet. So, to conclude
that Etruscans is originated from Turkey is a predisposition. This counters the
reading passage’s claim that the Etruscan’s language shows that they came from
Turkey.
Finally,
the lecturer points out that the funerary practices cannot be the reason that
Etruscans came from Turkey. This is because, the cremation practices in Italy have has gone 1000 years ago. And the Etruscans were was the successors in the local
region. 이 부분 반박으로 기능하기는 조금 표현이 어색한 것 같아요. 이탈리아에서 1000년 전에 사라진 관습이라는 설명보다 Etruscans가 있던 지역인 이탈리아에 이미 있던 관습을 물려받았을 뿐이라고 연결하는 게 더 자연스러울 것 같은데, 이 부분은 지문 확인하셔서 다듬어주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. This refutes the reading passage’s claim that the shared funerary
practices can explain the Turkish origin of the Etruscans.
Comment : 대립되는 주장과 설명들을 전반적으로 잘 정리해주셨습니다. 어색한 연결이나 불필요한 표현 등을 더 정리해주시면 좋을 것 같아요. 제가 지문 내용을 정확히 모르는 상태에서 요약문의 흐름만 보고 채점한 내용이니 실제 지문과 한 번 더 대조점검하면서 내용부분 체크해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 4/5 A response at this level is generally good in selecting the important information from the lecture and in coherently and accurately presenting this information in relation to the relevant information in the reading, but it may have minor omission, inaccuracy, vagueness, or imprecision of some content from the lecture or in connection to points made in the reading. A response is also scored at this level if it has more frequent or noticeable minor language errors, as long as such usage and grammatical structures do not result in anything more than an occasional lapse of clarity or in the connection of ideas.
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