■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :Spending time with family is more important than being at work. |
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▶ Your Answer : Some people think that spending time doing work is more crucial than
being with family. However, I disagree with them because the role as a family member
cannot be played by others and good family relationships have a good effect on work efficiency.
To begin with, mostly our role at the job can be replaced. However,
at the family, each of us have the value that cannot be replaced by others. For
example, if someone in charge with making pancakes or selling phones quits the
job, we can alternate him or her with others. There is not much problem with
it because there are many people who can do the work. However, if a mother of
children is absent for some reasons, it is so hard to make up the empty place.
Although we bring someone to take care of family members, it’s not enough if she
or he is not the one. Father and children would always have deficiency of his
wife and their mother. If there are two roles that we are playing, we have to
focus on the one that can be taken by only each of us.
On top of that, spending time with family also helps our work efficiency, too.
It’s the proved truth that having healthy relationships with our family is good
for our mental health. A stable life is based on harmonious family. Our mental
health and attitude for life are not irrelevant with performances at the job.
So, we should take more time for family not only for the family, but also for
our job. For example, if we spend our time too much only at work and neglect
our roles as a member of family, it must cause troubles in (전치사) our life. These will
damage our attention at work and our occupational ability will decrease.
We cannot replace our own mother or sister with somebody else. Family
is the community that is impossible to be restructured. Also, good family
relationships support our work. We should value our family more for both the
family and our jobs.
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