▶ Your Answer : According to the reading passage, early settlers on the island of Mauritius are main reason of dodo birds' extinction. However, the points made in the article totally disagree with the lecturer's claim that humans were not responsible to for the dodo's extinction.
Most of all To begin with, the article says that human hunted the dodo because dodos were convenient source of meat. On the contrary, the speaker expresses doubt on this point by asserting that people did not eat these birds. The lecturer asserts that these birds were bad tasting and disgusting so people might not eat the dodos.
Besides Furthermore, people cut down the forest to make space for communities and agriculture. The perspective is challenged by the lecturer's claim that there is no significant evidence. Because the settler arrived after the dodo's extinction, humans are not related with these bird's disappearance.
The last point made in the article is that people introduced external species such as goats and pigs on Mauritius and these animals bring about the birds extinction. The lecturer, however, contradicts this point by asserting that the birds disappearance was due to natural disasters. Therefore, were it not for human intervention, it would be disappeared.
In a nutshell, the lecturer entirely rebuts the reading passage, which argues humans intervention makes the dodos extinct, by mentioning that these birds' extinction is due to natural disasters. 통합형 에세이에서는 전반적으로 리딩과 리스닝을 비교한 것 이기 때문에 결론이 필요 없습니다.
Good: 24~30 점수: 25 대채로 리딩과 리스닝을 잘 비교하였습니다. 다만 아쉬운 점은 각 이유의 첫 번째 부분에서는 제가 첨삭한 단어를 사용하는 것이 좋습니다. 첫 번재 이유에서는 firstly, to begin with 등등을 사용할 수 있고 두 번째 바디에서는 furthermore, moreover등등을 사용할 수 있습니다. 그리고 통합형 에세이에서는 리딩과 리스닝을 비교하는 것 이기 때문에 결론이 필요 없습니다.. 수고많으셨습니다. |