The issue regarding the implementation of death penalties have always been a controversial issue of debate. Although many democratic countries these days abandoned the practice of death penalties, there are some drastic opinions that claim for reimpleminting to re-implement death penalties in their country as a method of suppressing high crime rate. Nevertheless, there are three important reasons why death penalties should not be permitted. First, the prime purpose of death penalties is so that citizens are to socially aware of punishment and criticism when committing crime. However, these death penalty judgement that are reliant solely by a judge may lead to false judgement. The fact that most punishment are value based and that death penalty results in death of a human being has too much risk. Second, since the second world war, many are aware of human rights. While appropriate punishment is needed to maintain the society, dealth penalty that leads to a death of a person is unnecessary and is evidently a violation of human rights. Third, killing a person for the sake of a just society is contradictory. An act of killing someone for any reason is certainly ethnically wrong and should be abandoned. Fair: 17~23 점수: 17 정리가 안되어진 독립형 에세이인거 같습니다. 구체적인 이유에 대한 설명도 없고 적절한 예시 사용도 없습니다. 특히 이유를 세 개 서술하였는데 세 개 다 정확하게 왜 이러한 부분이 사형이 허용되어야만 하는 지를 설득 하지 않습니다. 따라서 앞으로 에세이를 서술하실 때 구체적인 설명을 꼭 붙이면서 서술하시길 바랍니다. 이렇게 가볍게 세 개의 이유로 서술할 빠에는 차라리 두 개의 이유로 충분한 정보를 서술하는 것 이 더 좋을 거 같습니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |