▶ Your Answer :Even if it gets more and more various where
we can get the news from, many people still rely on new media to do that 이부분은 무슨 말을 하려고 하는 겁니까? 이해가 되지 않습니다. But
it is still controversial whether we should trust what the news media says or
they tend to carry biased aspect which definitely will mislead us in some other
points each news media company is associated with some other organizations
behind, no matter what they are, they seems to play crucial role when the news
media company issue their opinion or coverage. I don’t do not think news media is
something we can trust when it comes to get some point of view or news for
following reasons. getting the view points for the following two subsequent reasons.
For one example, To begin with, one Korean news company
which is based on SNS is owned by bigger press company and all they say on the
SNS is just the same to what their mother company pursues. Sometimes it even
seems that the news posted on SNS was not written but just copied and pasted
from its mother company’s news of the morning. I don’t think we can say the ‘son’
company’s news post is original idea of one news media company which is
supposed to cover social issue with their own point of view.
For another example, Furthermore some company work for
some groups of people with particular purpose. We can easily find many news media
is willing which is willing to write their news to support whom they work for. One of the most famous
conservative news media company “C”, which have had their power since Japanese
colonial era and still backs up those types of people, seems to have no objectivity
or logic. Korean rivers’ eco system is said to have destroyed because of a huge
national construction project which is carried by one of the previous president
who was on the conservative party, all other international experts say so, but
the C company was the only press company which fully supported that project and
denied all the symptoms happened to the rivers were not due to that project but
for some other reason. They didn’t give us any reliable sources for their arguments
and still mysterious.
To sum up, we cannot totally depend on news
media, especially only one type of news media to get information about specific
issues. Instead, we should train ourselves to be able to sort out what is the
right and what is wrong. For that, to try to get as many information as
possible from various news sources will help to get our own perspective to the
world.
Fair: 17~23 점수: 23 일단 정리가 덜된 거 같은 독립형 에세이인거 같습니다. 인트로 부터 시작해서 바디까지 정리가 안되서 그런지 장황하게 에세이가 서술되었습니다. 또한 인트로 같은 경우는 불필요한 설명들이 계속 나열 되어서 서술되었습니다. 바디 1 같은 경우는 주제를 벗어난 거 같습니다. 이 이유는 왜 우리가 뉴스를 믿지 말아야하는지를 잘 모르겠습니다. 따라서 이유나 예시를 서술할 때 그 예시나 이유가 주제와 적절한지를 항상 숙지하면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |