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As
a social being Being a social animal, we live with our friends during our lifetimes. So, it is one of
the most important thing to decide what kind of people we have to be friend
with go along with. Some people favor to be friend with those who are similar to them.
However, I think it is better to make friends who are different from us for the
following reasons.
To
begin with, to live in the world wisely, it is crucial to have broad
perspective. In this circumstance, friends who are far from us can provide
different perspectives, so we can widen our sight. For example, when I was a
high school student, I was truly proponent to utilitarianism. So, I always
thought that the right and happiness of an individual person can be ignored
sometimes for the happiness of the majority and society. However, one of my
friends opposed me. He said that each person's happiness is equivalent to the
happiness of the society, so individual's right cannot be prohibited in any
circumstance. I did not agree with his idea at that time, but after a debate
with him, I understood him to some degree. From the experience, I realized that
there are many ideas which are different from me and have to be considered
seriously can be dealt seriously, so I could widen my perspective. In the light of my experience, I
believe that different friends can be helpful for us. (이 부분은 앞 문장과 반복되는 문장입니다)
On
top of that, we can have various experience if we spend time with friends who
are different from us. When we have all the time spend with friends who have the same
favors, interests, or urges, the thing we can do together might be restricted
to the several activities. On the other hand, if we spend our time with friends
far from us, we can participate in various kinds of activities. For example, a
person who do does not like to go outside and do something, cannot experience
outdoor activities such as a football and hiking if he plays only with friends
who also love to stay in house. However, if one of his friends is so active
that truly love playing outside, the person has to participate in some outdoor
activities due to his friend. He or she might think it is burdensome at first.
However, I convince that it would be a good experience to him. In this regard,
I think having friends with different interest is advantageous to us.
To
sum up, not only can we broaden our perspective, but we also have various
experiences if we have friends who are far from us. Therefore, I believe it is
better to have friends who are different from us than those who are similar to
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